All Comments on 'Gas Station Hammering'

by FINC

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AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Loved it.

I've known a lot of cops in my days, this did my heart good to read.

Sir_NathanSir_Nathanover 18 years ago
A pretty good short story...

I would have liked to have known more about Mariah. In that sense, the old guy being there was a good device under-utilised. I liked the surprise (finding out he was a cop), but again more ambiguous background info would have helped raise this from a decent story to something fairly special.

SN

Extreme BohunkExtreme Bohunkover 18 years ago
nice job FINC

Good story, gritty.

voltsolvoltsolalmost 18 years ago
I have always been a Mariah fan

Another delightful story ! Bill is so crazy it makes this story so much fun to read. Too bad Bill couldn't have been left with her a little longer.... perhaps getting rid of the car and finally throwing her limp used body in a shallow grave behind the outhouse. I will never look at or listen to the pop singer again without thinking of this story. Thankyou.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
I was quite impressed.

It gets better as you sit back and think about it, too.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Thanks ~

Another great story ~ thanks for the fun read!

visceralgirlvisceralgirlover 13 years ago
Please proofread

Too many grammatical errors and typos spoil your otherwise great story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
mariah?

Im thinking, what with the fancy car, toned body, good voice, and the name Mariah, that it was in fact, mariah carey

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Small detail...

I believe you meant to use the word "Gallic" rather than "Gaelic" at the beginning. Two very different meanings.

Could use proof reading or editing.

Pretty good story, though.

debbievdebbievover 10 years ago
OMG...that is my fantasy.....me being Mariah.

I swear that has been my fantasy for a long time....city girl in the country.....car broke down or kidnapped by some country bumpkin(s)....and stripped and used of all dignity. wow....just awesome. i got very wet reading it.

loved the ending.....very clever. :-)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Fantastic!

My absolute favorite piece, I keep coming back again and again to read this one! Very talented writer and definitely a perfect work! <3

AnonymousAnonymous11 months ago

This is the best writing / story telling i have read in a long time

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