by FINC
I've known a lot of cops in my days, this did my heart good to read.
I would have liked to have known more about Mariah. In that sense, the old guy being there was a good device under-utilised. I liked the surprise (finding out he was a cop), but again more ambiguous background info would have helped raise this from a decent story to something fairly special.
SN
Another delightful story ! Bill is so crazy it makes this story so much fun to read. Too bad Bill couldn't have been left with her a little longer.... perhaps getting rid of the car and finally throwing her limp used body in a shallow grave behind the outhouse. I will never look at or listen to the pop singer again without thinking of this story. Thankyou.
It gets better as you sit back and think about it, too.
Too many grammatical errors and typos spoil your otherwise great story.
Im thinking, what with the fancy car, toned body, good voice, and the name Mariah, that it was in fact, mariah carey
I believe you meant to use the word "Gallic" rather than "Gaelic" at the beginning. Two very different meanings.
Could use proof reading or editing.
Pretty good story, though.
I swear that has been my fantasy for a long time....city girl in the country.....car broke down or kidnapped by some country bumpkin(s)....and stripped and used of all dignity. wow....just awesome. i got very wet reading it.
loved the ending.....very clever. :-)
My absolute favorite piece, I keep coming back again and again to read this one! Very talented writer and definitely a perfect work! <3