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Your poem was mentioned in the sunday reviews.
du lac~
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I saw a few grammar errors, but all are easily fixed with a simple edit, which I hope you'll take the time to do so once seeing them yourself.
I enjoy your story-like poems, they're an entertaining read.
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The rhyme isn't working for me. Too much text
for it. I think about the poems Mutt did. Seems
they didn't rhyme. It works sometimes and the tale is
worth hearing. This one doesn't flow like the rest.
It's still good but it ain't you. sandspike
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Damn Art;
been so busy of late, can't remember how this develops;
will just have to read, follow, and enjoy;
just keep it with my earlier note ~
cheers.
pm~~
Wild West.
A feeling of sojourning in the days of the Wild West. Each one of this series of poems telling a story is a delight.
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