I really enjoyed the story, but found myself wondering, with all of the groaning and screaming that they were making, where Mom and Dad were. I know that had I heard a commotion like that coming from my kids rooms, my wife or I would certainly have investigated if for no other reason than to ensure that one of them wasn't ill.
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Anonymous09/07/05
sqouze?
was a good story, you need to make it a little more real and you will be a better author!
Those Who Can Do, Those Who Can't, Teach ! So why don't you nitpicking assholes go back to teaching your English class and quit telling people who are writting stories and putting thier names on them a break. If you don't have the BALLS TO SIGN YOUR NAME, SHUT THE FUCK UP !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Anonymous09/08/05
Good Start!!!
Good story Dante, I'll be looking for more stories in the future.
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Anonymous09/09/05
Pregnant Please!
It would be great if she ends up knocked-up! She was a virgin and they did it bareback more than once. Soooooo erotic to me. More please.
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Anonymous09/09/05
A flower
So, she'd been in his bed before - and nothing had happened? Yeah!
Lukas
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Anonymous09/10/05
good read
for the most part its definately a good read. probably could have used a bit more character development and build up before he takes her virginity. for the next chapter, she should definately have a "oops" baby and they deal with the consequences of their actions.
it has promise and i'd be interested in where this goes.
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Anonymous09/11/05
Do a bit of research please
Guys who never had a virgin should study and learn the location of the HYMEN
English
More please
Write a few more stories please.
Loved it!
I really enjoyed the story, but found myself wondering, with all of the groaning and screaming that they were making, where Mom and Dad were. I know that had I heard a commotion like that coming from my kids rooms, my wife or I would certainly have investigated if for no other reason than to ensure that one of them wasn't ill.
sqouze?
was a good story, you need to make it a little more real and you will be a better author!
TO MR. ANONYMOUS
Those Who Can Do, Those Who Can't, Teach ! So why don't you nitpicking assholes go back to teaching your English class and quit telling people who are writting stories and putting thier names on them a break. If you don't have the BALLS TO SIGN YOUR NAME, SHUT THE FUCK UP !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Good Start!!!
Good story Dante, I'll be looking for more stories in the future.
Pregnant Please!
It would be great if she ends up knocked-up! She was a virgin and they did it bareback more than once. Soooooo erotic to me. More please.
A flower
So, she'd been in his bed before - and nothing had happened? Yeah!
Lukas
good read
for the most part its definately a good read. probably could have used a bit more character development and build up before he takes her virginity. for the next chapter, she should definately have a "oops" baby and they deal with the consequences of their actions.
it has promise and i'd be interested in where this goes.
Do a bit of research please
Guys who never had a virgin should study and learn the location of the HYMEN
Fantastic
Fantastic story, very erotic. I can't agree with the character development comments, but the grammar & English ones are sound. Very very good!
pussya fo life
nice story
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