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by Anonymous

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by don8765409/08/05

Good, but could have been better

Needs some spell checking, and sentence structure correction. And I'm not sure.....but I think that fucking in swimming pool water with its chemicals is pretty hard to do, or painful as the chemical balances rinse off the natural oils of pussy and pre-com....at least that has been my experience.

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by Anonymous05/25/08

simple advice

you need an editor..a good story trying to get out

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