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OMG....
PLEASE keep going with this story. i want to see where you go with this, how the final ending is. you are doing a womderful job so far! i look every day for this a continuation.
Great Job!
You're doing a great job! I'm so in love with these characters! The development, the suspense, it was all well worth the wait! I love it!
what happened?
this story was going so well, and then BAM! Mark starts acting like a crazed stalker. Unfortunately, his speech was more crazy than romantic - he grippd her arm until it hurt. Oh well...but since I'm such a fan of chpts 1-3, I'm holding out hope that chpt 5 will follow the romantic sweet eroticism b/w 2 best friends now that their feelings have come to bear.
more please
love the story but i do agree that it jumped very quickly from romance to sex, which is cool-i'm not going to say i didn't enjoy the scenes,but can we have a little more story with the sex for the next part please?
:)
Outstanding,passionate.
Very passionate,very well written. I loved it.
on and on
I love it. Great story and I hope it continues with more encounters.
mark wahlburg?
thats my guess on who its based on :) lovely stories :) i love them so much i've read them probably 4 times :)
amazing
awesome
Best on the site
This is the best story I have ever read on this site. The mix of humour and serious thoughts are so well balanced. While highly erotic, it is believeable too.
Please keep writing
What's most appealing is...
...how much love they show for each other.
Their mutual kindness and consideration.
Until this story makes a sudden jump.
You should back up to the end of the prior story
and build a more credible transition.
Lovely characters!
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