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Imagery ... nice ~
Very telling, yet ... not.
Like the imagery here Bill ~!
More Please ~
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Bill, as is, it is little more than a funny slogan. Develop it out, you have a scenario, and really a klller end line.
always
tarry over your little gems...this is one I would have written...last line was really good...am agreeing with 1201...needs developing...take care/bluerains
agree with 1201
but still gets a five for that killer ending......don
i like it...
it says all it needs to say ...quickly effectively without any extra bull...leaves you to your own images...good job buddy!
Hugs and Kisses,
T
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Excellent.
Want to do something with it?
Write a book about it and use this in one of the facing pages.
Returning to Ashes.
Life's speedy departure ~ aided by guns.
lives being cut
Three years from the inception of rhe poem and the words are as fresh as in day one. No wisdom added since; no lessons learned from warnings. Just more and more insanity pours on...
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