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Good first effort
Might have been improved for a final read through, spelling, grammar, etc. A hot little tale nonetheless, well immortalised.
needs too many corrections
Why wasn't this proofread? It's not a bad story, but the gramatical errors are distracting. Sure, it's not an original story, been written hundreds of times. If someone is going to rewrite a common fact pattern, at the least they should run spell check.
Hot but,
Hot story, but it could have used a bit more polishing to help the flow. Still, a good effort.
Variation of Self Cuckolding From The Hired
Fucker's viewpoint - arousing but it seems every new writer pimps out his lead wimpy male's wife to a guy with a much bigger cock while the wimp jacks off. Why is that???
Perhaps in some areas this is the way to break in a new young wife's pussy - now ya know the non-manly husband's short weiner dick won't keep her home now unless he pimps her out to bigger cocks at interval - perhaps more than one at a time - perhaps blacks next time - gee this wimp has little chance of siring offspring the longer this goes on but the money will be handy and the love precious!
Sorry writer - no bonus points here as while a speel check and editor will help form and shape - your sick lack of respect or reality doesn't permit erotic or sensual arousal - for some just sick jaded jackoffs like the wimp husband!
As we have more than enough lack of reality and respect type writers perhaps you could consider another theme to generate some credibility and respect for you and some genuine arousal for us semi-normals? Please consider.
Ahhh if only I could find such a young beauty
It would most likely kill me but what the hell I would risk it all for a night such as you discribed in your story. A blonde 19 year old who loves to fuck and take cum. Oh yea that's what I'm tlking about! Good jerk off story, even if you don't really like cuckold stories!
so, you let joe fuck, your 18 year old wife.
nice try. i'll bet she was your wife and you wanted to give her a good fuck for her birthday, and get off watching.
just call me for your anniversary present.
nice story
read again and correct urself
plz author
read ur story once
Marvelous!
Great writing..
-C.A.N.
DFW, TX
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