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This poem holds the building power of the approaching wild horses. Free, strong and attainable only in the moment. Nice write Art keep going
du~
Wonderful
The refrain beautifully illustrates the subject-- well done.
Fly
Excellent piece
Cometh the wonderful poet
This is wonderful Hun, I love
the way it builds and flows and
rolls of my tongue.
Keep up the great work my friend!
~JC (Gushing as always)
A VERY STRONG
imagination and powerful use of words, W*E*L*C*O*M*E
sGp
the refrain
makes this a stronger piece. I enjoyed it. Good job, Art.
love it
This is full of rhythm. My new favorite of your
out west poems. sandspike
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This a good poem with lots of action, a fun read.
this really is a very
strong pen for you...bow to the muse...you did him well...blue
Yee-HAH
"gather together on gathering day
they're coming
yes, coming
wild horses are coming this way."
what else can I say? you here, have mastered the art of repititon - put it to music
"Beating the earth in a drumming sound
hundreds of poundings pounding the ground"
with drums
on the slight downside, the first two lines could and SHOULD be stonger
Thunder that rumbles across a cloudless sky - change cloudless to something else
This is your weakest line, kind of old, kind of akward:
"is the sound of an ancient wild and free pride"
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The rhythm of coming and coming
creates tension -
and builds the image
of the thundering herd.
But you knew that -
well done once again, Art.
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