Another Day , Another Great C. vs. N. Installment Reread
This time I'm savoring the little details missed on first read. Very tender mutual seduction on page one. Beth the beautiful flower yearning to be pollinated. Poignancy in spades which isn't the norm from this author but apparently drew upon it at crucial moment like street racer shifting into turbo.Thx for great (re)read.
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Anonymous10/28/11
keeps getting better.
Every chapter I read keeps me loving this story. From the situations and conversations, to the discriptions of the sex. They both keep my interest peaked in the characters and keeps me hard and cumming in every sceen of sex. The sexual passion that Jake shows to each women is different but makes me love each scene of lust just as much as any other.
Good story so far but you need a continuity girl...
... as I needed one for one of my stories. He had fingers in her the night before, yet broke her cherry in the morning. And as others have noted, the name thing with Karen.
But good writing and a fertile plot line. I'm happy that there's so much more yet to read.
CONGRATULATIONS. This series continues to provide everything an erotic story should strive to achieve. Great characters interact with believable, natural dialogue. The sex is hot and feels right for the situation.
Thank you for sharing.
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Anonymous09/09/14
who?
You should decide who Karen is and edit this thing. I've read this several times and really enjoyed it, but even knowing what's coming I get confused when Nancy is mentioned.
by
Anonymous06/30/15
Proofreader?
You are telling a great story. But you really need to get a proofreader. At least you know the difference between words such as: lose and loose or possibly: bored and board and such. But, I need to know if there really is a Nancy in this story or if you have mistakenly put Nancy for Karen. This is not being nit-pickey. Changing names in the middle of a story is confusing to me as a reader. But I'm really enjoying this story. I think it is really good that you have had Beth, who is a virgin, to mount him and effectivly take her own virginity. Anyway, she is in control. I think it should always be this way with young girls and their first time. She should always be on top, controlling the pace and timing. This is especially good since he is such an insensative jackass sexually. But really, get a proofreader.
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Anonymous10/15/15
I second the first comment!!
I couldn't agree more. A GREAT story, like all I've read of you thus far. The name mix-ups are my biggest criticism. It can be confusing. Outside of that and a few typos, I am more than PLEASED sir!
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Anonymous03/31/16
Nancy
Who is Nancy
by
Anonymous08/05/16
nancy?
Great story so far, but you need to decide what your characters' names are and then edit your story before you submit it. Stuff like that interrupts the flow when I'm in the middle of reading. While I'm reading, I'm picturing in my head what is happening and I put faces to the names of main characters. And then a wildcard shows up that has nothing to do with the tale I am reading. Just be a little more careful
English
Great story!
Yeah, I loved it. He's living the all-male dream ... and it just keeps getting better.
One small constructive criticism: did Karen's name change to Nancy in this chapter? If not, who is Nancy?
Great story!
Yeah, I loved it. He's living the all-male dream ... and it just keeps getting better.
One small constructive criticism: did Karen's name change to Nancy in this chapter? If not, who is Nancy?
Love This Story
Erotic as hell, my wife is going to love what I have planned for her. Best writing I've read so far. Great story!!
nancy
yeah the karen/nancy thing was pretty confusing...
Another Day , Another Great C. vs. N. Installment Reread
This time I'm savoring the little details missed on first read. Very tender mutual seduction on page one. Beth the beautiful flower yearning to be pollinated. Poignancy in spades which isn't the norm from this author but apparently drew upon it at crucial moment like street racer shifting into turbo.Thx for great (re)read.
keeps getting better.
Every chapter I read keeps me loving this story. From the situations and conversations, to the discriptions of the sex. They both keep my interest peaked in the characters and keeps me hard and cumming in every sceen of sex. The sexual passion that Jake shows to each women is different but makes me love each scene of lust just as much as any other.
This is shaping up to be my favorite story.
Love it!
I am very much enjoying the series and look forward to reading more of your work
Love it, but who is Nancy?
'Nancy' seems interchangeable with 'Karen'.
Private joke, nickname, or typo?
Otherwise, love the story.
Ditto what anon said...
Who is Nancy?
Good story so far but you need a continuity girl...
... as I needed one for one of my stories. He had fingers in her the night before, yet broke her cherry in the morning. And as others have noted, the name thing with Karen.
But good writing and a fertile plot line. I'm happy that there's so much more yet to read.
Who is Nancy?
The name appeared out of the ether, and was repeated. Is it supposed to be Karen?
Classy Narration exquisite sex scenes.
CONGRATULATIONS. This series continues to provide everything an erotic story should strive to achieve. Great characters interact with believable, natural dialogue. The sex is hot and feels right for the situation.
Thank you for sharing.
who?
You should decide who Karen is and edit this thing. I've read this several times and really enjoyed it, but even knowing what's coming I get confused when Nancy is mentioned.
Proofreader?
You are telling a great story. But you really need to get a proofreader. At least you know the difference between words such as: lose and loose or possibly: bored and board and such. But, I need to know if there really is a Nancy in this story or if you have mistakenly put Nancy for Karen. This is not being nit-pickey. Changing names in the middle of a story is confusing to me as a reader. But I'm really enjoying this story. I think it is really good that you have had Beth, who is a virgin, to mount him and effectivly take her own virginity. Anyway, she is in control. I think it should always be this way with young girls and their first time. She should always be on top, controlling the pace and timing. This is especially good since he is such an insensative jackass sexually. But really, get a proofreader.
I second the first comment!!
I couldn't agree more. A GREAT story, like all I've read of you thus far. The name mix-ups are my biggest criticism. It can be confusing. Outside of that and a few typos, I am more than PLEASED sir!
Nancy
Who is Nancy
nancy?
Great story so far, but you need to decide what your characters' names are and then edit your story before you submit it. Stuff like that interrupts the flow when I'm in the middle of reading. While I'm reading, I'm picturing in my head what is happening and I put faces to the names of main characters. And then a wildcard shows up that has nothing to do with the tale I am reading. Just be a little more careful
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