Half sister? Like you're half committed!
"Left here there to deal" whats that mean?
Usually your stories are great - this one looks like you threw it together without thinking, without editing; it doesn't seem like a category you're comfortable in. Just write good stories, don't worry about contests.
yes the story is short but it's obvious that there is more to come, so I don't mind. The story follows the standard story line almost exactly but again, the old sibling blackmail plot is always hot so who cares.
Keep up the good work. I always look for your name when I scan new submissions
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Anonymous10/09/05
great story
reading it gave me immense pleasure.....please do keep giving such master pieces.
I've read all 16 chapeters and wow. This reminds me of me and my step-brother.
Except I wasn't so hesitant at first. Thanks for writing this. It's fantastic.
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You usually do better
Half sister? Like you're half committed!
"Left here there to deal" whats that mean?
Usually your stories are great - this one looks like you threw it together without thinking, without editing; it doesn't seem like a category you're comfortable in. Just write good stories, don't worry about contests.
Good, but could have been better
A half-finished story gets a half-good rating.
ignore the bad comments
yes the story is short but it's obvious that there is more to come, so I don't mind. The story follows the standard story line almost exactly but again, the old sibling blackmail plot is always hot so who cares.
Keep up the good work. I always look for your name when I scan new submissions
great story
reading it gave me immense pleasure.....please do keep giving such master pieces.
Wow!
I thought it was really, really hot!!!
LMAO
I've read all 16 chapeters and wow. This reminds me of me and my step-brother.
Except I wasn't so hesitant at first. Thanks for writing this. It's fantastic.
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