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Missed rhyme
This would be a much better poem if you had not missed the rhyme in the fourth line of the first strophe.
i.e. "As the sun plays hide and seek."
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Ah yes,
but still I like the picture
your words paint...
Nice!
I like your near-rhyme, and would like to see more of them in your writing actually. Nature, is imperfect, that is what makes it beautiful, and I feel the same way about poetry. Very pretty combo here. as
almost missed this
reading this one ..its has much earthen substance and heart..warm sighs/bluerains
Excellent!
I loved the images that this poem gave in my mind; rich, deep and earthy...
softness.
The lovely pastel drawing seems to set the stage for this delicate rendering. I loved the abundant imagery contain in the delightful stanzas.
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