What If? Reading Erotica Ch. 04

Great Work

Fantastic story.

Enjoyed it immensely

It was an original, clever and well conceived story. Thanks for the ride.

Enjoyed it immensely

It was an original, clever and well conceived story. Thanks for the ride.

Great Ending

I enjoyed your story immensely. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Boyd

can't wait until you've

lived the next chapter. hope it doesn't take too long. at least i'm hoping the door is still open for an update in the future. great story, great writing, maybe a great author. anyway, a great fan here.

Well done

If the story is well written and the characterizations are strong enough, then an indeterminate end is the best finish. You had good development of these characters. If ever there was a case for 'temporary insanity' you made it with Marsha.

Thanks for a great ride.

Very Nice

I enjoyed it very much. Please keep up the great job. Thanks.

Well done

Good ending to a good story. Great job.

Ok for fantasy.

It's just too hard to believe that Roger would not be doing some hard time for the assault.

Good Story

Shows the ups and downs of cheating. Everyone has their fantasies, and have most people no intention of trying to live them. She took his fantasies and used them as an excuse to cheat. She was very sorry, but only after she was caught. It is nice to read a story where people have to face the consequences of their actions.

I think this needs more

Like all good stories I don't want it to end, but it would be nice to have a conclusion to Roger's and Marsha's relationship.

NOw this was a QUALITY story!!

This is one of the very best ever writen on this site. This IS real life. No gimmicks...not sic assed perverts pretending there's is just an alternative life style which should be respected and accepted. No cheating wives screaming for teat big , black, one-eyed monster. This is great. Please, lets see more like this one!

Hey if Chagrined like it....

It has to be good!

And I agree. He liked reading erotica....like anyone here can throw stones.

And for her it WAS an excuse...like the old 'I was feeling old' excuse.

She went crazy, and well...lost her man.

in the end we are left in the uncertainty of the relationship, will they get back together?

CAN they?

The only question I have is what really does she think now...we got to hear it in the previous chapters, now here it would be great.

But near perfect in it's delivery.

Can't wait for more.

Excellent Finish

The story did have plot twists at the end. It was a quality story and I did like it----I think that 1st Chapter is very, very hard to equal. I don't think the subsequent Chapters did equal it but they are of high quality.

So my criticism is like the criticism of a baseball player who finished the season hitting 0ver .300 but didn't win the batting title. (Can the English & the Aussies relate to that?)

looking forward to seeing other stories from you.

playingcardcompany

well-done

this is thoughtful and emotionally powerful. The lack of a settled ending is convincing, because it's too soon for the characters to know what is best for them. I find that very compelling.

Thanks for a great story, we look forward to more.

ohio

Very well done

Thanks to the author for a very well done story. He took an interesting premise and expanded it into a very credible tale. I found it to be very believable. It showed how adultery does have consequences. I look forward to more of his output.

Good

No every good story, well written. The ending was alittle weird only in the fact that it was so open. He loved her but left but didn't divorce her. I know this knd of thing happens in real life sometimes, but both people are stuck with no past and no future.

Good Ending

I wonder why men and women (mostly women, I guess, as these stories portray) who had fucked around on their spouses tend to SLOW down or even stop entirely (if that's ever possible) once found out, a finding which ruined the marriage ---- when they are NOW free to fuck as they please, with as many men (or women) as they please?!

Wouldn't it make more sense to say to oneself, when the marriage and the idiotic spouse are rid off, "I'm gonna fuck so many, so much,,, I'm gonna do it until I die and no one is going go find out and I don't give a shit who finds out,,, these restrictive codes most people pretend to believe in are BS, not for me"???

Isn't that a better, sounder attitude?, for those who like to cheat, to have it on the side, that is,,, NOW they can have them as main course all the time, right?!, so why the tears or stoppage all together?

rhetorical, of course

Super Reality with Human Delivery

In the confusion of rampant emotions many human possible reactions may and do surface. You told this from a firm but thoughtful considered perspective not achieved very often here or anywhere else. One could hear you contemplate and choose directions that had basic substance founded in the pains of life's reality.

I feel you placated the romantics with the seperation but you made it a viable option. Given the reactions you painted for him, I felt you may have done this to allow more time for his children to accept what will surely and reasonably follow.

To fall once could be human, but to flount it secretly for 6 months with multiple John's is a crime against humanity let alone your lifetime partner. Such actions aren't a whoops! They are coldly calculated with careful intent that is not forgiveable. Well, not forgiveable by a spouse who respects themself enough to know that they can make a life without the one who coldly disrespected and intentionally hurt them deeply.

So anyway Author, your work and your lifelike perspective is very much appreciated as it mirrors life's possible reactions to marital wrongs and the real inescapable consequences driven by selfish stupidity and short term thinking.

With High Regard

Captivating and original

I liked the original theme of the story (the relations between reading a fantasy and acting on it). The narrative was built in a very unusual way through the typed story of the husband and than combined with wife’s POV. It all held together very well and kept me captivated. I paticulaly liked the ending, which successfully avoided the usual pitfalls of the formulaic endings, common to many "cheating wives" stories. In one area I Initially felt that the story was lacking. I refer to the area of the direct emotional impact of the characters. In other stories you actually believe that the world crushed on the husband (and the wife). In this story I felt a very different tone. Here it is more of a report of facts, a commentary of someone who learned something important about himself and his wife. The tone is almost philosophical. Initially I thought (as did some other readers) that the shock was the main reason for the flatness of his emotional expression. But the tone never really changed. Than I had a mini “AHA” moment. I realized that this tone goes very well with the character of the husband. I could see that it could have been the author's design to show, rather than to just tell us, how this man thinks and feels. The wife on the other hand, did come as somewhat less convincing in her reactions and motivations.
While NOTHING EVER justifies lying and cheating, I felt that I could see, rather than being told, how draining a life with a reclusive minimally expressive person could be. As the husband himself contemplates at the end, his lack of expressiveness and self isolation might have been a contributing factor in his wife’s ultimate betrayal.
Overall a wonderful and original work!

First Rate!

This work reflects the multi-dimensional qualities of human beings- husband's lack of commuication skills; wife's flawed commitment to the marriage (I found her remorse more about being caught than regretting her actions). Children do effect outcomes in real life so tossing the mother of his children to the side would make the husband as callous as the wife.

I also agree with Kolkore's comments about keeping the ending open. Keep up the good work and look forward to the next story.

SleeplessinMD

Actually a very good story

It had everything that made it seem real to me. You used the standard "Husband is cluess to the afair, Husband find out, Husband gets angry, Husband leaves" (those were there) but you didn't put into the mix "Husband takes wife back and pretend everything is all better and never thinks of all those betrayals ever again".

Of course you ended the story at that point, but thats what made it intresting too, it was different and most folks after finding out that would have walked too.

First Class Material

This is some of the most honest stuff we have ever read. Thank you. We rate you right up there with Ohio, H20, Headhunter, KK and Aussie Bard. This story was refreshing and we like you style of writing stories that are realistic and honest. Hats off to you!

Your Fans!

Chapter 5

I enjoyed all 4 chapters. I hope you write chapter 5!

Marsha, Marsha, Marsha!

I know why you named your female lead character Marsha, just so you could use that line (spoken by Jim when he invited her to his Motel room for a 6 o'clock cock, er....appointment.

TIME IS RIGHT

TIME IS RIGHT TO END THIS STORY, BUT DON'T STOP WRITING

beautiful story

keep up the wonderful work!

Reading erotica

That is how it started for us also. We did do all the thngs we read about for about 3 months and then we stoped before it killed our relationship. After 26 years of with each other we are now as happy as we were in the first 10 years.

Good story

Damn poor ending. Reality is no fun here!

Men HAVE forgiven more. They have what, 20 years together, two great kids, wondeful memories of all types. Put it all together and it is most of a great lifetime. With another great chapte, or two, if her infidelity can be overlooked and counseling can reconcile the issue and their partnership. It's possible.

Any more chapters here??

one affair let slide,but 5 men and 6mos.no way

nancy wants to replace marsha.why be lonely.

no connect

a very interesting story since it moves fast.
However there is no connect whatsoever in the beginning and the end. It seems that you made up your mind about treating the subject and her actions in a particular way.
No build up on characters and little consistency.

But its fast and works well

Thanks Again...

Thanks again, DG. This is up to your usual high standard. Really enjoyed it. A little editing, though, is called for. Marsha's handgun must have been a .25 caliber, not a 25mm; and you have a continuing problem with the past tense of "to see."

How does this sound to you? When I looked at the index, I seen that DG Hear has a large number of intriguing titles.

NO MORE CHAPTERS

I'm sure if you wrote one more chapter they would all be living together.MARSHA SCREW NANCY HUSBAND AND BECOME HER BEST FRIEND ARE YOU NUTS.

I think that the biggest problem with reading the

Stories in Literotica is that only a few are like yours...Real. Most of the stories are by some real sick individules that want to see other men fuck their wives. Perhaps in the recesses of their minds is the thought that they themselves wish the could be their wives and have sex, sucking them and letting them have anal sex with them. These are the sick minds that I read to be able to answer them correctly, But I am afraid that reading too muck shit gives you a shitty outlook on life. The only respite is that you and JW66 and guy's like Winterfron and lately Woodmanone make the mind a little better. Thanks for writing

You pressed my button!

I spend far too much time reading Literotica, it is like a drug. At first I read it to be turned on by the sex but I very quickly found that became boring, so now I read stories that deal with emotions.
You deal with emotions better than most, definitely amongst my top five favourites.
The more precise ordering depends on what I last read.
At the moment you're number 1.
Thank you very much for another great read.

Now I fully support that finish lol

Like I need to -

Yep that one works for me - I do suspect that he and Marsha might? ought? could? get back together with a new relationship. But maybe not? It is really hard to get past that sort of fundamental betrayal and she HAS to get past thinking there anything okay about what she did regardless of whether or not she believes he ever wanted it. She never did it in the spirit of a shared excitement just selfish control and her satisfaction, to fix her problems seeing herself.

Fix yourself you cannot fix others -

I liked this story..

I too like to read a lot of the stories on this site. I fail to understand the so many people that write and read the stories about husbands watching their wife fuck other men. It really makes me kind of sick. I believe that those people are a little bit touched in the head as well. IMO a real man does not get off on that sort of thing, but that's me. You have become a very good writer. I enjoy your stories. There are about 10 really good writers on this site. You are one of them.

very most excellent

he saved his balls 5

Excellent story

I wish the ending was different though. I would've loved for roger to get together with nancy they seem like a perfect fit. Marsha's reasoning for becoming the office cum receptacle is the most idiotic shit I've ever heard, I understand that she was feeling old & un-needed-- but I'm confused as to how fucking her male co-workers made her feel/accomplish these things? She didn't explain this. What Marsha did was cold & calculating, she made preparations in not to get caught, by tricking poor roger into giving her the classic clues of cheating sluts getting caught. She enjoyed pulling one over on roger, if Marsha truly believed that roger was getting turned on reading those cheating wives story or that he wanted to try any of those things; then why didn't she bring roger in on her fuck sessions? Why did she go to the trouble of hiding her extracurricular activities ? Marsha is just another slut with a 101 bullshit excuses as to why she has been fucking half her co-workers. Like roger, I spend a lot of times on literotica reading LW stories, I too laugh at some of the shit that's written & I too always tell my husband about the stories-- especially if the husband is a wimp, I've never ever got it into my head that my husband would want to try any of the shit I've read --well maybe anal-- I'm certain that my husband don't think I'd want to try them either. The stories I love are cheating wives--it's almost an obsession ( I don't know why--so don't ask) I don't read incest, wife swapping, group sex, creampies or wife watching, these are just sick stories to me so I stick to what I'm not disgusted by (sometimes) I actually stalk some of my favorite writers page (like stangstar06, huedogg2, Jimbob44 & many more). The wife should've known her husband a little better especially after being together for over 20 fucking years. As a woman I can somewhat sympathize with Marsha regarding Rogers lack of attention & lack of compliments, but I've never sought these out by other men I sit my husband down & tell him how I'm feeling--the key to a relationship is communication, we women tend to forget that men aren't mind readers & unless its about basketball or football husbands won't know what we are feeling. It takes me two hours to get ready; do you know after all that time, when I ask my husband how do I look he looks at me for 10 seconds and say--alright!!! That's his version of beautiful. Women want to hear compliments, I do my best to always look my best because I am a reflection of my husband & I want him to be proud to have me on his arms, I don't need validation from other men, when other men compliment my looks I always say--yeah I know--lol... Because their compliments means nothing to me I don't take two hours to get ready for their approval --fuck'em. Maybe Marsha should've spent less time plotting, planning & fucking her co-workers & more time spicing up her marriage. What can I say--a slut will be a slut

I agree with and appreciated Danger's comment.

DG, please write one more story (and I know it is just a story but I would like to see it finished no matter how you end it) and please do not give us alternate endings. My preference is that he divorce Marsha but remain friendly with her and continue being fair (he was more than fair) and to continue to be supportive of his children. This story just cries out for him to get with Nancy, her older child already loves him. Come on, DG, do it for your readers. Thank you, Lamar.

Excellent

What a tremendous tale. There are lessons to be learned. Never cheat on your spouse is the first. Don't become a fucking slut. The cheating cunt fucked everyone in sight. Then she was sorry. HA

Roger needs to be happy again. Write another sequel, find him a good woman.

The Makings Of A Good Story

But you need better editors. People who do know what grammar and syntax are. Why? It's always disconcerting to get INTO a story and get jarred out of it by reading what any 8th grade teacher should have corrected.

sums it up quite well methinks

your last paragraph says it all,you just got to "keep it real" and all will be fine.
I gave you a 5 for your interesting read.

this was an excellent read. thank you!