nicely written, but as to subject matter... just another slut wife story, wimp hubby this should have been in interacial though and you may have got better reviews for a white slut black cock story
by
Anonymous10/28/05
better
If her black lover had left the happy couple a little token of his appreciation they could have pushed around the mall in a dual or triple baby carriage.
His pride in his wife would have been complete if the black and his wife allowed him to raise and care for several black superior children to remind him daily of his place and also that his wife considered him as just a meal ticket and to "look proper" to her friends. Perhaps a couple of kids by his dad too. I love the possibilities. She is young (26). She could maybe have 10-12 interracial babies before menopause or a hysterectomy, all boys,thick lipped, and monster cock equipped like their daddies.
by
Anonymous10/28/05
Anotherbore,
and misplaced by category story (for higher readership?). It should have been in the Interracial or the Gay section. Never mind, it would still be a bad one under any category. Can’t you put ONE, only one particle of non - imitated material into “your” story? And please don’t repeat your mistake.
Another sample of the WHSW (Wimp Husband Slut Wife) repetitive formula. As a result – the telephone book is more erotic than this story. Following on another readers comment, try to make it a little bit less formulaic.
by
Anonymous10/28/05
Well Aren't You Special
Constructively - First type with both hands - Then take a writing class - Then can you spell interracial (hint it's not Loving Wives) -
Finally, to be authorized to write a wimpy pimp story about whoring out your wife slut to fuck hemungus black cocks while you watch or tape you need one of two prerequisites:
A Graduate Degree of "Self Cuckolding Yourself into Gayness" from the U. K. School of the same name "or" a certified video of you pimping out your wife to gangbang 28 or more blacks studs with a minimum of 18" long and 6" wide cocks - now this tape witnessed by your mom's and dad's or minister must show you fluffing and sucking up their cocks then sucking their stringy cum from her red cunt at 3 to 5 cock intervals while wearing your small rusty cock cage and exchanging "I Loove Youz So Much" with the mother of your children(?) during her air tight 4 somes. Man its Heartwarming seeing the sick love shown! Optional is your brainscan indicating one with an I.Q. under 39.
Black Green Orange Purple who cares if it's a wimpy pimp pitiful male whoring out his loved one Put It In FETISH with Pissing where it may be appreciated with the other subhuman absurdities enjoyed by the few sicko's.
by
Anonymous10/29/05
ptretty ho hum stuff..
Nothing much even exciting here. Everyone plays their roles by the book. Jealousy, anger, concern for the future of the relationship? Nah!
by
Anonymous10/29/05
Gave up
I gave up half way though the second or third paragraph, when it became obvious it was another wimp husband pimping his wife story. What happened ? Doesn't anyone write about normal husbands any more or normal wives? The Ct. Yankee
by
Anonymous10/31/05
good stuff
It amazes me that so many readers have such hangups about categories. Many of the comments here seem to be made by insecure macho boys. Perhaps they would be better off rereading through their old stacks of Hustler. Stories like this offer a chance to expand beyond the traditional, open your minds to the possibilities. Are you afraid to admit you enjoyed the fantasy?
by
Anonymous11/02/05
Ah - freedom of speech
"Put It In FETISH with Pissing where it may be appreciated with the other subhuman absurdities enjoyed by the few sicko's."
Nice to see a rational comment from Anonomous in USA - the torch-bearer of free speech. Wonder if he graduated with a Masters in "Red Neck Philosophy" - from the US School of the same name
PS. Didn't particularly find the story erotic, but having read it to the end, I wouldn't denigrate the author for putting his particular fantasy down on paper. I do however find it amusing that such a story can ruffle so many feathers. Methinks they do complain too much
by
Anonymous08/07/10
Black
White on black is very erotic also... ever think of that?
English
Another fag posing as a straight man
Husband needs to come out of the closet! He can get his cum straight from the source.
Let Down
I really wish they would give some warning when it's a Bi or gay story.
good
nicely written, but as to subject matter... just another slut wife story, wimp hubby this should have been in interacial though and you may have got better reviews for a white slut black cock story
better
If her black lover had left the happy couple a little token of his appreciation they could have pushed around the mall in a dual or triple baby carriage.
His pride in his wife would have been complete if the black and his wife allowed him to raise and care for several black superior children to remind him daily of his place and also that his wife considered him as just a meal ticket and to "look proper" to her friends. Perhaps a couple of kids by his dad too. I love the possibilities. She is young (26). She could maybe have 10-12 interracial babies before menopause or a hysterectomy, all boys,thick lipped, and monster cock equipped like their daddies.
Anotherbore,
and misplaced by category story (for higher readership?). It should have been in the Interracial or the Gay section. Never mind, it would still be a bad one under any category. Can’t you put ONE, only one particle of non - imitated material into “your” story? And please don’t repeat your mistake.
Try harder
Another sample of the WHSW (Wimp Husband Slut Wife) repetitive formula. As a result – the telephone book is more erotic than this story. Following on another readers comment, try to make it a little bit less formulaic.
Well Aren't You Special
Constructively - First type with both hands - Then take a writing class - Then can you spell interracial (hint it's not Loving Wives) -
Finally, to be authorized to write a wimpy pimp story about whoring out your wife slut to fuck hemungus black cocks while you watch or tape you need one of two prerequisites:
A Graduate Degree of "Self Cuckolding Yourself into Gayness" from the U. K. School of the same name "or" a certified video of you pimping out your wife to gangbang 28 or more blacks studs with a minimum of 18" long and 6" wide cocks - now this tape witnessed by your mom's and dad's or minister must show you fluffing and sucking up their cocks then sucking their stringy cum from her red cunt at 3 to 5 cock intervals while wearing your small rusty cock cage and exchanging "I Loove Youz So Much" with the mother of your children(?) during her air tight 4 somes. Man its Heartwarming seeing the sick love shown! Optional is your brainscan indicating one with an I.Q. under 39.
Black Green Orange Purple who cares if it's a wimpy pimp pitiful male whoring out his loved one Put It In FETISH with Pissing where it may be appreciated with the other subhuman absurdities enjoyed by the few sicko's.
ptretty ho hum stuff..
Nothing much even exciting here. Everyone plays their roles by the book. Jealousy, anger, concern for the future of the relationship? Nah!
Gave up
I gave up half way though the second or third paragraph, when it became obvious it was another wimp husband pimping his wife story. What happened ? Doesn't anyone write about normal husbands any more or normal wives? The Ct. Yankee
good stuff
It amazes me that so many readers have such hangups about categories. Many of the comments here seem to be made by insecure macho boys. Perhaps they would be better off rereading through their old stacks of Hustler. Stories like this offer a chance to expand beyond the traditional, open your minds to the possibilities. Are you afraid to admit you enjoyed the fantasy?
Ah - freedom of speech
"Put It In FETISH with Pissing where it may be appreciated with the other subhuman absurdities enjoyed by the few sicko's."
Nice to see a rational comment from Anonomous in USA - the torch-bearer of free speech. Wonder if he graduated with a Masters in "Red Neck Philosophy" - from the US School of the same name
PS. Didn't particularly find the story erotic, but having read it to the end, I wouldn't denigrate the author for putting his particular fantasy down on paper. I do however find it amusing that such a story can ruffle so many feathers. Methinks they do complain too much
Black
White on black is very erotic also... ever think of that?
Not worth a comment
This is not a comment
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