The Dividing Line Ch. 02

Like I said

reminds me of Dickens.

Fiction, good fiction, makes the real, real.

Very nice work.

Well done.

Terrific!

Absolutely terrific, fantastic. A great love story told perfectly. Thank you seems inadequate. I hope we'll be seeing more from you.

Wow!

Thank You!

LOVED IT

MAN WHAT A BEAUTIFUL STORY. HITS HOME TO WHAT LOVE MEANS.
KEEP ON WRITING THESE KIND OF STORIES

Wonderful

This wonderful story should be read by everyone. It tears at your heart strings and brings tears to your eyes. I am refering to the complete story, not just this chapter. It does make for some thought as to how the world is and how, ideally it should be. Thank you!

Thank you for a beautiful tale

It has everything, Please carry on!

John

great

Both parts are wonderfull. I hope you write more just like this.I found the tale very moving.

Wonderful

Great ending to your story!

Boyd

Well done

Well done and great story. Tons of emotion.

Good Job

this is one of the best storie on this site or an site.

Bloody male-chauvinist

And she just *had* to change her last name, didn't she? That way, she's his property forever, right? Bloody MCPs. I thought we got rid of those in the last century.

On the contrary

I think the change in name was a very nice ending. It was in its own subtle way very meaningful. Congrats.

Keep on sailing...

and the wind be ever at your back. Thanks for another superior work.

I don't cry

But I actually did cry...thinking Eddie had died. I don't know why that reader thought the story deserved a 0% because she took his name??? That's simply ridiculous. I know women who have chosen to keep their last names...or hyphenate theirs with their new husbands. That reader made a judgement/score that was biased and they should have just not given the story a score. I'm you can't score honest...just dont.

It just gets better

I don't know how many times I've actually read this story. 20, 25, I've lost count. Like every story this author writes, it sucks me in, propels me to a place I don't fully understand, but that I want and need to go. And I will keep coming back to that place for as long as the author will let me.

And as an owner of a few Triumph sports cars, I truly love that little piece of the story.

Bravo

Most excellent.

Real Life?

All of your stuff sounds like real life. A pilot, a pirate, a cop..... And you write of death as though you have experienced way too much of it.......

another great story

I won't mention that for the forth time,..your regurgitation fetish made an appearance lol

A lovely story about life, love, partnership and... Reawakening! However the old sailor in me would have liked a life jacket on during the "storm." 😧

some would call it the reveal

I just think of it as, with a few short lines much is learned, and the awakening begins.
Thanks AL for the glimpse into your background.
and for the story of two of the most unlikely people to become a couple.

Wow! What a story you've written!

If your own love story strongly (or even somewhat) resembles the story of Ed and Sara, then you are a really lucky man. "The Dividing Line" (both parts) brought tears to my eyes, and made me think about the lack of joy and happiness in my own love life. Thank you so much.

You may want to check the spelling of the neutral possessive "its", and tone down the romantic descriptions just a little, to avoid "purple prose" syndrome. Aside from these minor complaints, I think your story is nearly perfect.

Hhmm...

A lovable story, really. But he's about 20-25 years her senior. That's a little "creepy" to say at least. I wouldn't say that he's a child molester, but it comes awfully close to that im my mind. If a have a recommendation towards the author: don't make the guy older than 10 years.

Zarek11

you must have missed the words by and about the author.
And, remember what you said in another 30+ years, your viewpoint might have changed.

Another

Great Story AL. Can't believe I had missed this one. Thanks for sharing.