All Comments on 'Bonnie with Biceps'

Pathetic. Give it up.

But it could have been a lot better. I think you rushed it. Even muscular women like to take their time before grabbing onto their prey. It would have worked better to have him going a couple of times to the gym and getting more intidated as time went on. Then have her come over to help and get aquainted. Just a thought. Don't rush your stories so much--take time to build the tension and characters.

JimDinMN

Fiction has to make sense. This didn't.

VERY SEXY, I LIKED IT, BUT IT WAS TOO BRIEF A STORY