I've enjoyed this series, but you made a big blunder... When the father asks in this installment if she'd been fucked and she said no, I thought she was just lying to protect herself... then what followed made it clear you were writing her as a virgin in this part.
Did you forget that in part three, she had full-penetration sex with Hansel? That's sloppy writing, Honeymuff...
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Anonymous09/22/05
More Hansel & Gretel
Very fine indeed. Super hot and looking forward for more.
Well written.
FurLove
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Anonymous09/23/05
I want more!
I have really enjoyed this series. You have a very creative mind and should consider reworking some of the other classic fables and fairy tales. Keep up the good work.
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Anonymous10/10/05
more more more more
make it ch. 05 thanks cfh
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Anonymous10/24/05
What is the moral?
I think the father is no better than the old hag. Why is that he deserved such a good ending while the old hag had to die? Shame on you!
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Anonymous09/12/06
Loved It
Probably the best I've read at this site. Hot and well written.
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Anonymous06/07/11
that
That was great I loved it. I love fairy tales you are one of the few writers on here with talent great job 5 stars
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Continuity problem
I've enjoyed this series, but you made a big blunder... When the father asks in this installment if she'd been fucked and she said no, I thought she was just lying to protect herself... then what followed made it clear you were writing her as a virgin in this part.
Did you forget that in part three, she had full-penetration sex with Hansel? That's sloppy writing, Honeymuff...
More Hansel & Gretel
Very fine indeed. Super hot and looking forward for more.
Well written.
FurLove
I want more!
I have really enjoyed this series. You have a very creative mind and should consider reworking some of the other classic fables and fairy tales. Keep up the good work.
more more more more
make it ch. 05 thanks cfh
What is the moral?
I think the father is no better than the old hag. Why is that he deserved such a good ending while the old hag had to die? Shame on you!
Loved It
Probably the best I've read at this site. Hot and well written.
that
That was great I loved it. I love fairy tales you are one of the few writers on here with talent great job 5 stars
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