not well-written, not interesting, a waste of time.
Not sure what to make of it, but it sure was different.
'Eyes sliding over you with the impersonal flow of water over rocks' come on, man! You've had that happen to you, haven't you? That is brilliant visuality!
Why did the editors give this a green "E"?
Absolutely excellent. Ignore the negative feedback. It's well-thought, well-written.
Thanx for writing this,
Please, please, don't give up your day job. This was terrible.
Were I a piggy little troll, I might knock down your numbers, but this is so exquisite and funny...
An interesting premise (if I understood you correctly). This scene stands alone very well. Excellent use of imagery.
Well, you get an A+ for originality....Laurel and Manu salivate over this kind of thing. In every other respect the story is unsatisfactory, barely comprehensible and full of contradictions. (why would heaven have "horns" and a "tail"??) And why would anyone care if such a repulsive character gets to heaven or not anyway? There really is no sex here, so this belongs in the non- erotic category. Your other new story, Stalk, is much better and has been rated accordingly. I think 3.25 for this one is just about right...the masses have spoken!
Very well done and definitely deserving of the "E." ~Imp
I love this little gem. Beautifully written. Excellent work.
This is brilliant. It has so many dimensions and different readers will get different things out of it. Just... brilliant.
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