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duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
Afraid no more...

Emotionally shaken ~ in a daze - no longer afraid with Someone by your side. I love the sounds and wordplay here.

LeBrozLeBrozabout 17 years ago
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Better meter here, through the course of the poem. That last line could be improved with one very tiny change from:

"For I am here by your side."

to

"For I'm here by your side."

That small thing makes a huge difference

.

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