It's a pretty decent story line. I want to encourage you to keep writing. But really, you need to get an editor to iron out the dropped words, word choice errors, etc.
After reading some of the comments in the Feedback Portal, I thought, why not? I'm very glad that I did because it is a nice story. Sex and romance makes for a nice ending and that makes this Horny 'ol Sailor happy. Thank You. Ronnie W.
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Anonymous09/27/05
A good memory----
This is a really nice story, the sex was fun but the set up even better, it took me back to the days as a teen reading a low key romance novel where the story was fun and the sex was minimal, so this combined the 2 elements really well! I like the fact that everyone was a sane adult, just enjoying the moment.
English
GREAT
Loved it! Please write more
get an editor
It's a pretty decent story line. I want to encourage you to keep writing. But really, you need to get an editor to iron out the dropped words, word choice errors, etc.
-- KVK
good story
i enjoy this a lot,nice build up and great visualition from your words,please write more
Supa!
Keep up the the supa writing and show us more!
A Very Nice Story
After reading some of the comments in the Feedback Portal, I thought, why not? I'm very glad that I did because it is a nice story. Sex and romance makes for a nice ending and that makes this Horny 'ol Sailor happy. Thank You. Ronnie W.
A good memory----
This is a really nice story, the sex was fun but the set up even better, it took me back to the days as a teen reading a low key romance novel where the story was fun and the sex was minimal, so this combined the 2 elements really well! I like the fact that everyone was a sane adult, just enjoying the moment.
Keep up the good work!
Wow....
Baby, please write more. Loved the build-up Got me very moist!
MzzzzKitty
More please!
I enjoyed it very much, looking foward to more of your work.
Nicely written
Very good story, nice character descriptions and good build up to the sex.
Mirriam
Fun story
I especially like the comment about WT.....Go Buffs........would liked it a bit longer, it was just showig possibilities.
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