All Comments on 'Pizza Party'

Your use of descriptive words and dialogue were absolutely brilliant, helping to create a vivid and sexually realistic story. For one of your first ever submissions, this is amazing! I can't wait to read more of your writing.

it's hard to write a relatively short story like this, where every word counts. You do this extremely well. Bravo!!

Short and Sweet. Wonderfully written. Great work!

I was first attracted by your poetry. Now I'm finding your stories equally addictive. I urge you to continue writing.

This is a well written story. It's just in the wrong category. There is no element of Sci-Fi or Fantasy in it. Nor does it need such an element. So, if you can, shift it to a different area of this site.

The fact that it's the sexual fantasy of every pizza faced delivery boy doesn't count.

... a SciFi/Fantasy story.

It's difficult to do very short erotic fiction well. This was a good, quick scene.

Short, but niice. Keep up the good work, Sorry, but until u get a sequel, this is going to get 1 star ):