All Comments on 'Reluctant Lovers'

by McKenna

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LeBrozLeBrozover 18 years ago
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Welcome to the poetic side of Lit.

seduction of insomnia -

quite a task you've taken on...

impressiveimpressiveover 18 years ago
Sensual and stirring

Well done, McK! ~Imp

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Poems are cool

Well, they are.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Brilliant metaphor!

Sucking insomnia's cock? Wow.

I'm not sure you completely pulled this off, but the idea is so audacious I really liked it.

Um. Now I'll probably be "up" all night. (grumble)

tz

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Oh I liked it

Was wandering through the mood thread and found the link.... I have wished for this many times.

Always, E

lucky-E-levenlucky-E-levenover 18 years ago
Indiscriminate lover - Insomnia

McK - This was a wonderful portrayal of the tempest brought on by sleeplessness. I could almost feel the itchy burn in my eyes and the irritation of desire denied ... even the fury barely kept at bay until the world fades to black. Fantastic writing. I hope to see more soon.

~lucky

BelegonBelegonover 18 years ago
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Very original McK. An inspired choice...

hugo_samhugo_samover 18 years ago
Right There

You take the reader right into your insomnia and solution. Unique prospective. Well done.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Insomnia's embrace

Very cool. I could actually imagine this through your words, no mean feat that.

BRAVA~

Pedal-JohnnyPedal-Johnnyover 18 years ago
It is

Absolutely lovely. Merci.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Great poem

Very interesting!!

baileyoldbaileyoldover 17 years ago
Clear

I read your poem and had such a clear vision in my mind... It was very erotic.....very classy.....

arienettearienetteover 17 years ago
Wow

I love this poem. I read it again and again...about six times and still can't get enough. Absolutely love it.

duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
Sleep perchance to dream...

Such a clever way of describing insomnia as a insatiable lover. So clearly and well described.

Luke's AngelLuke's Angelabout 16 years ago
She has talent but what has she been working on?

I think she is too sparing with her words however. Too unyielding a view of what constitutes good language and not enough attention to the underlying ideas that give meaning and life to our existence. Our lives being more then the precision of words placed just so. Instead let her listen to the music and dance in the embrace of her partner while couples whirl around about them reveling in the sum of whole being greater than the individual parts.

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