by McKenna
Welcome to the poetic side of Lit.
seduction of insomnia -
quite a task you've taken on...
Sucking insomnia's cock? Wow.
I'm not sure you completely pulled this off, but the idea is so audacious I really liked it.
Um. Now I'll probably be "up" all night. (grumble)
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Was wandering through the mood thread and found the link.... I have wished for this many times.
Always, E
McK - This was a wonderful portrayal of the tempest brought on by sleeplessness. I could almost feel the itchy burn in my eyes and the irritation of desire denied ... even the fury barely kept at bay until the world fades to black. Fantastic writing. I hope to see more soon.
~lucky
You take the reader right into your insomnia and solution. Unique prospective. Well done.
Very cool. I could actually imagine this through your words, no mean feat that.
BRAVA~
I read your poem and had such a clear vision in my mind... It was very erotic.....very classy.....
I love this poem. I read it again and again...about six times and still can't get enough. Absolutely love it.
Such a clever way of describing insomnia as a insatiable lover. So clearly and well described.
I think she is too sparing with her words however. Too unyielding a view of what constitutes good language and not enough attention to the underlying ideas that give meaning and life to our existence. Our lives being more then the precision of words placed just so. Instead let her listen to the music and dance in the embrace of her partner while couples whirl around about them reveling in the sum of whole being greater than the individual parts.