Okay she's been cheating for most of the marriage and, according to her, the kids are her lovers. Now what is the betrayed husband thinking? On to ch. 2....
As others have said, she and Dixie talk about "all of his cheating", while SHE'S been having an affair for almost the entire marriage, and has apparently foisted her lover's kids off on her husband!
His reaction is kinda missing to that little nugget, as well as the reveal that his supposed friend Joe is in on it.
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Anonymous06/25/16
4 Stars for the story... Zero stars for the stupid mistakes in spelling.
IF YOU WANT YOUR WORK TO LOOK MORE PROFESSIONAL, YOU DESPERATELY NEED A PROOF READER WHOSE SPELLING IS BETTER THAN YOURS IS. THE ONE YOU HAVE MAY NOT BE AS BAD AS YOU ARE BUT CERTAINLY LEAVES MUCH TO BE DESIRED.
She was devastated, and just kept mopping (the word is MOPING... mopping is what you do to a floor) around....
When I first seen her I fell head over heals (the word is spelled HEELS.... heals applies to medicine) for her.
I got these two examples from the fourth paragraph of this chapter. I’m not going to copy and paste the hundreds of other fuckups that I’m sure I’ll find in this story but why don’t you consider expanding YOUR OWN EDUCATION so that you don’t have to rely on others? Others ALWAYS let you down.
English
Second Read
Okay she's been cheating for most of the marriage and, according to her, the kids are her lovers. Now what is the betrayed husband thinking? On to ch. 2....
Thoughts
As others have said, she and Dixie talk about "all of his cheating", while SHE'S been having an affair for almost the entire marriage, and has apparently foisted her lover's kids off on her husband!
Did George also cheat?
His reaction is kinda missing to that little nugget, as well as the reveal that his supposed friend Joe is in on it.
4 Stars for the story... Zero stars for the stupid mistakes in spelling.
IF YOU WANT YOUR WORK TO LOOK MORE PROFESSIONAL, YOU DESPERATELY NEED A PROOF READER WHOSE SPELLING IS BETTER THAN YOURS IS. THE ONE YOU HAVE MAY NOT BE AS BAD AS YOU ARE BUT CERTAINLY LEAVES MUCH TO BE DESIRED.
She was devastated, and just kept mopping (the word is MOPING... mopping is what you do to a floor) around....
When I first seen her I fell head over heals (the word is spelled HEELS.... heals applies to medicine) for her.
I got these two examples from the fourth paragraph of this chapter. I’m not going to copy and paste the hundreds of other fuckups that I’m sure I’ll find in this story but why don’t you consider expanding YOUR OWN EDUCATION so that you don’t have to rely on others? Others ALWAYS let you down.
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