Truth be told, I was about to give up on the story (and on Steven) half way through the story when he started banging on all these other girls, but I'm glad I stuck through it b/c his feelings toward Jessica were so tender and so sweet!
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Anonymous01/10/11
Ehh
The conceited pompous attitude made me despise the main character from the start, that alone made me dislike the story.
Don't pay attention to the negative comment. The fact is, this was very realistic and quite believable. He had typical attitude for a macho male. The fact he was able to understand himself would be the toughest thing to do. Great Job.
I got a little lost in the other girls too, but it made sense in the long run as he finds Jessica again.
Keep up the good work.
English
You ended it too early
You should have kept going, man, I was hot...
fantastic story - very emotional
like the fact that it's a true love story - is it real?
Not finished!
I really enjoyed this story. Why didn't you finish it? I realize it has an obvious conclusion, so why didn't you go there?
So sweet!
Truth be told, I was about to give up on the story (and on Steven) half way through the story when he started banging on all these other girls, but I'm glad I stuck through it b/c his feelings toward Jessica were so tender and so sweet!
Ehh
The conceited pompous attitude made me despise the main character from the start, that alone made me dislike the story.
Very Realistic
Don't pay attention to the negative comment. The fact is, this was very realistic and quite believable. He had typical attitude for a macho male. The fact he was able to understand himself would be the toughest thing to do. Great Job.
I got a little lost in the other girls too, but it made sense in the long run as he finds Jessica again.
Keep up the good work.
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