ALL that bitterness being done in ch1 and 2 and wimp out no anger no rage? what type of men do you know? Men get pissed Men get hurt this guy was neither just yeah okay you tried to fuck me over and yeah the kids dhu dha i think there mine- WTF, im thinking you could kill this characters kids and he might say stop in the middle of killing them... he might say stop maybe if it didn't upset the killer.
It would be my guess (I know it is just a story) that he decided that as much as he wanted more revenge on her (and Paul) he had more respect for his children and figured out that it would have hurt them more if he had done as he desired about getting more revenge. I would have cornered Paul and beat the crap out of him (or probably have hired it done to avoid legal charges) and made sure that his cock and balls never worked properly again. If this was real life there would be trouble between Paul and his slut because she made him think all these years that the kids were his. It was so great that Paul's wife revealed to him that their kids belonged to his brother and that they were going to be married soon. Justice served.
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Anonymous06/27/13
Grammar
In your stories you credit people that have helped with your story line, etc. every store I have read you use the word seen instead of saw. Your proof readers are doing a lousy job or else you have very poor grammar.
Good result. When you figure that most of us live in no fault states and that our legal system is biased against men even when women are in the wrong this is an excellent result.
If you have kids, and if they love their mother (some don't) then you have to take their feelings into account. That said, you can torture the shit out of the boyfriend and do everything you can to destroy him!
And there is no way in hell that the kids would forgive their mother, unless they were callous bastards like her. Despite what you may think, even adult children still react in the same way to the break up of a marriage as teenagers would, and assign blame accordingly. After reading the letter, which was designed to be as hurtful as possible, and with her trying to even sever the link between them and their father, they would NEVER forgive her. Anything else is just "Christian Dogma" about forgivness, which is mere self delusional bullshit. Most of your stories lack the one thing a good story needs: Emotion! All your characters react so unemotionally as to not be believable. They react as if they are reading the t.v. guide! You don't even attempt to insert emotion in your characters, because all your stories revolve around you trying to illicit sympathy for the wrongdoer.
He should have taken even more revenge on her lover, humiliated him more in public, saying the he wasn't able to have his own children...But for me one question stayed answered: did she and her lover stayed together after all? I don't believe so...
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Anonymous12/28/14
He was no angel too; he even admitted as much.
To all those idiots castigating calling him a wimp for not going nuclear on their asses, you so easily forget that in the 1st chapter he admitted to multiple counts of extra marital encounters himself. To do as you wanted would make him the biggest form of hypocrite there was. No, the amount of vengeance was just right and well deserved.
He admits that he is no saint, but remember, she wasn't giving him sex at home, and was having a long-term affair, and at least in her mind, foisting her lover's children on to him.
I have read a lot of your stories some I comment on others I don't only because others have said pretty much what I was going to remark about. However, I must say that in almost every story of yours I find that you don't really go overboard with them but you seem to remain on the boundary of realism. You do however make your stories believable like this could be something that can, and often does really happen. That puts you in the category of being a pretty good author ( in my book anyway ) and I do enjoy reading your stories for that very reason. Now for my comment on this story....... Again I liked it, and again, it wasn't like this couldn't actually happen. I did like the ending when it came to good ole Paul the arrogant shithead lost all of his bravado when he found out the kids weren't his. Also that his brother was the daddy to his other kids, that was a stroke of genius. Anyway damn good story. keep up the good work I have enjoyed all of your stories that I have read so far.
No double standards. No excuses and no passes for either of them.
I guess the fact that he was cheating on her for years has no bearing whatsoever. Does the fact that he admits, "He was no saint" make him honorable? Or how about the fact that his wife wasn't giving him any. He still has needs right? This is a kind of green light, isn't it?
I find it amusing that he gets a pass from the LW crowd, but if a woman on this site were to use these lame excuses then she would have committed a crime that is punishable by death.
Someone else's wrong doings does not excuse your own. He didn't know she was cheating when he chose to. In his mind, he was cheating on a faithful wife. In fact, she knew he was cheating before he found out about her.
You are, of course, correct. He was also a self-confessed cheater, (Chapter 1). And, yes, there tends to be a double standard when it comes to men cheating. Cheating is cheating, no matter who is doing it.
They stayed together for the kids, no love between them really. Hard to say who is primarily at fault in their marriage, but I don't suppose it really matters. Might have been her attitude after she started the affair with her old boyfriend or it might have been his attitude towards her because he was cheating. Maybe not any blame at all, might just have gotten over the initial attraction and nothing was left. So, no one is really primarily to blame for this fucked up marriage.
On his wife considering the years they were married and the years she cheated on him. The one sunny note is that Paul has no offspring of his own.
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Anonymous08/20/16
Not enough...not nearly enough
He was too nice at the end. The kids should have shown their total disdain for her. I would have had one of the boys go over and bitch slap her then pound Paul into the ground!
I tried to give it a 5 but it wouldn't let me. maybe it this new windows 10 acting up I don't know. It is good. If the husband feels complete then that's it. let the victim set the punishment.
you are like that character in that Gina Davis movie where she is a pirate captain and buys Mathew Modeen from a slave auction because he says he is a doctor. Anyhow, as they are involved later on in a huge sword fight he is an excellent swordsman but can't figure out what to do to his opponent to win. And that's your writing, you swordfight the shit out of the story, you just don't know how to kill your opponent or in this case get a decent resolution. It's all thrust and repost but no actual meaningful resolution.
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Anonymous12/10/16
Idiot commenters!
He cheated during his marriage too. So stop saying that the wife was the only cheater. He was the worst cheater since he had multiple partners which significantly increase the risk of STD!
English
where is the passion?
ALL that bitterness being done in ch1 and 2 and wimp out no anger no rage? what type of men do you know? Men get pissed Men get hurt this guy was neither just yeah okay you tried to fuck me over and yeah the kids dhu dha i think there mine- WTF, im thinking you could kill this characters kids and he might say stop in the middle of killing them... he might say stop maybe if it didn't upset the killer.
He had more class than I would have.
It would be my guess (I know it is just a story) that he decided that as much as he wanted more revenge on her (and Paul) he had more respect for his children and figured out that it would have hurt them more if he had done as he desired about getting more revenge. I would have cornered Paul and beat the crap out of him (or probably have hired it done to avoid legal charges) and made sure that his cock and balls never worked properly again. If this was real life there would be trouble between Paul and his slut because she made him think all these years that the kids were his. It was so great that Paul's wife revealed to him that their kids belonged to his brother and that they were going to be married soon. Justice served.
Grammar
In your stories you credit people that have helped with your story line, etc. every store I have read you use the word seen instead of saw. Your proof readers are doing a lousy job or else you have very poor grammar.
Ugly
Wimp. Vile bile female dog wife. Should have been burned at the stake.
Good story
Good result. When you figure that most of us live in no fault states and that our legal system is biased against men even when women are in the wrong this is an excellent result.
Enjoyed it
Thanks for the offering.
Tricky thing
If you have kids, and if they love their mother (some don't) then you have to take their feelings into account. That said, you can torture the shit out of the boyfriend and do everything you can to destroy him!
Paul deserved more revenge.
He handled it right with Dorothy although she deserved more. Only for the sake of the kids.
Paul was a bastard - and certainly got what he deserved finding out he had NO children - that is a huge blow to an EGO as large as he is.
He will get more - people will now know how pathetic they both are -
He is likely to have fucked others who will now come out of the woodwork - his ass has yet bo kicked but it likely will get there -
sliding downhill even faster
and there is a deep pile at the bottom.
What a wimp
And there is no way in hell that the kids would forgive their mother, unless they were callous bastards like her. Despite what you may think, even adult children still react in the same way to the break up of a marriage as teenagers would, and assign blame accordingly. After reading the letter, which was designed to be as hurtful as possible, and with her trying to even sever the link between them and their father, they would NEVER forgive her. Anything else is just "Christian Dogma" about forgivness, which is mere self delusional bullshit. Most of your stories lack the one thing a good story needs: Emotion! All your characters react so unemotionally as to not be believable. They react as if they are reading the t.v. guide! You don't even attempt to insert emotion in your characters, because all your stories revolve around you trying to illicit sympathy for the wrongdoer.
he should have...
He should have taken even more revenge on her lover, humiliated him more in public, saying the he wasn't able to have his own children...But for me one question stayed answered: did she and her lover stayed together after all? I don't believe so...
He was no angel too; he even admitted as much.
To all those idiots castigating calling him a wimp for not going nuclear on their asses, you so easily forget that in the 1st chapter he admitted to multiple counts of extra marital encounters himself. To do as you wanted would make him the biggest form of hypocrite there was. No, the amount of vengeance was just right and well deserved.
@Anonymous 12/27/2014
He admits that he is no saint, but remember, she wasn't giving him sex at home, and was having a long-term affair, and at least in her mind, foisting her lover's children on to him.
Nice
I have read a lot of your stories some I comment on others I don't only because others have said pretty much what I was going to remark about. However, I must say that in almost every story of yours I find that you don't really go overboard with them but you seem to remain on the boundary of realism. You do however make your stories believable like this could be something that can, and often does really happen. That puts you in the category of being a pretty good author ( in my book anyway ) and I do enjoy reading your stories for that very reason. Now for my comment on this story....... Again I liked it, and again, it wasn't like this couldn't actually happen. I did like the ending when it came to good ole Paul the arrogant shithead lost all of his bravado when he found out the kids weren't his. Also that his brother was the daddy to his other kids, that was a stroke of genius. Anyway damn good story. keep up the good work I have enjoyed all of your stories that I have read so far.
JUST LET GEORGE DO IT
and He will do it and come out strong. TK U MLJ LV NV
No double standards. No excuses and no passes for either of them.
I guess the fact that he was cheating on her for years has no bearing whatsoever. Does the fact that he admits, "He was no saint" make him honorable? Or how about the fact that his wife wasn't giving him any. He still has needs right? This is a kind of green light, isn't it?
I find it amusing that he gets a pass from the LW crowd, but if a woman on this site were to use these lame excuses then she would have committed a crime that is punishable by death.
Someone else's wrong doings does not excuse your own. He didn't know she was cheating when he chose to. In his mind, he was cheating on a faithful wife. In fact, she knew he was cheating before he found out about her.
Double standards people.
Nice
It's great that the kids are his. Fucking worthless cunt. I hope she and her sterile lover are happy together. While in pain.
@Javmor79
You are, of course, correct. He was also a self-confessed cheater, (Chapter 1). And, yes, there tends to be a double standard when it comes to men cheating. Cheating is cheating, no matter who is doing it.
Kids and Divorce
While I would never tell the kids to hate their mother, I wouldn't ENCOURAGE a loving relationship either.
If the kids felt enough anger at her actions to ostracize her, that's their prerogative, and I wouldn't try to talk them out of it.
Very well turned out story.
They stayed together for the kids, no love between them really. Hard to say who is primarily at fault in their marriage, but I don't suppose it really matters. Might have been her attitude after she started the affair with her old boyfriend or it might have been his attitude towards her because he was cheating. Maybe not any blame at all, might just have gotten over the initial attraction and nothing was left. So, no one is really primarily to blame for this fucked up marriage.
Not enough revenge
On his wife considering the years they were married and the years she cheated on him. The one sunny note is that Paul has no offspring of his own.
Not enough...not nearly enough
He was too nice at the end. The kids should have shown their total disdain for her. I would have had one of the boys go over and bitch slap her then pound Paul into the ground!
good story
I tried to give it a 5 but it wouldn't let me. maybe it this new windows 10 acting up I don't know. It is good. If the husband feels complete then that's it. let the victim set the punishment.
Unreal
32 years of cheating and this is his reaction?
Hmmm
you are like that character in that Gina Davis movie where she is a pirate captain and buys Mathew Modeen from a slave auction because he says he is a doctor. Anyhow, as they are involved later on in a huge sword fight he is an excellent swordsman but can't figure out what to do to his opponent to win. And that's your writing, you swordfight the shit out of the story, you just don't know how to kill your opponent or in this case get a decent resolution. It's all thrust and repost but no actual meaningful resolution.
Idiot commenters!
He cheated during his marriage too. So stop saying that the wife was the only cheater. He was the worst cheater since he had multiple partners which significantly increase the risk of STD!
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