All Comments on 'Onyx Dreams Ch. 01'

An interesting start. Good set-up.

I almost laughed when the one invading the though of another seems to berate the invaded.

Starts out great, with interesting characters and plot. But really starts going downhill midway with bad direction, choices and outcomes. Just to be left dissapointing and incomplete.

Save yourself the Irritation readers.

And author , if you're so inclined, please revamp the story, streamline it, prevent some of the unnecessary descent to disaster and bring it to a conclusion with some salvation and worth. K & C deserve better.

-JD