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Your goal ...

In your bio you said:

... don't read my stories to read of some sexual act that you've never thought of before; read them because you want to experience what those two felt when they were doing it and how nice it might be if it happened to you. At least that's the goal.

You reached it ... and more. A lovely, erotic story. I hope you'll continue it.

Waves!

Such moments of desire and emotion all intertwined with lust that burns so deeply. I loved the seductive buildup to your story!

Very good.

This is very good. Arousing, and at the same time keeping a good atmosphere and a non-silly language. Cudos.

Wow

Oh Wow- 100% plus. I was coming from beginning to end
More. More

Well Done

I really felt the passion between the two people and I could definately identify with them completely. Plus, you leave your reader wanting more and that's good story telling. I'm looking forward to more stories. Suzie

Really grabs

How is it that sex between women can be so intense and at the same time be so calm and soft? Men just don't know these things. Very nice...

so nice

Your story had a softness about it, but so well mixed with pure unbridled sex. My nerve endings were stimulated right from the start. Keep up the great writing.

Risk

Taking a risk always adds to the excitment of a moment, whether it is jumping from an airplane, sex in a public place or taking a chance on a new lover... Your story captured that excitment wonderfully!!

Delicious

What a delicious story. Wonderful premise, very well developed, and dialogue that helped further the plot. I enjoyed being inside the character's head, hearing her thoughts--it makes it so much easier to imagine myself in her place. Two smart, sexy women going at it. I love the fact she's loud and self-conscious about it.... so am I ;)

more like a lifetime

It held my attention all the way through.
Love the way you have them interacting with
one another.

Thanks again,
Julie Van
julie_van30@yahoo.com

Sensitive and well written.

M-Y,

Just the type of story we have come to expect from you. Tender, with just a hint of wildness, I love how your two characters challenged each other. That was so sexy and stimulating. So true to life and honest.

Light and Lovley

Fantastic banter, luv the early age thing. Thought the leaving statement was a bit early in the story, but it produced the right ending - when do we get part 3?

Got the wow thing here too - more X

More

yes

All I can say is....I was right there! Wow!

this is make me run my best time yet!

It's like you took all those fleeting fantasies I have when I'm running and put them into an actually narrative so much better than I can ever imagine. Thank you, I will definatly be thinking of this one on my next run.

I like it!

Short, and very enjoyable. I love the way M-Y describes what is going on in her head...almost as if she doesn't deserve what she is experiencing...Very nice.

I’m Seething

Okay… You’ve made me jealous, jealous of her, your alter ego, jealous of you because you write so well.

Susana would have scared me some. She’s kind of the type to bring a moving van with her on the second date. Haven’t we been there before?

The scene would definitely scare me to death… and orgasm.

Loved your story

Its a delight to read a story where the characters seem like real people. You do emotion so well.

Excellent

Well done M.Y, very well done. I couldn't find fault with the story, really. It was exciting, sensual,erotic, just the type of encounter most lesbians, bisexuals and bicurious women can only dream about. I hope I meet my Susanna some day!

So powerfully feminine...

...and loving, and giving, and oh-so-hot, hot, hot! Thank you for an exquisitely erotic story. You possess an extraordinary skill with words. I hope to see more of your writing.

Utterly Endearing

This story was so utterly endearing. Such a charm.
The women affirmed each other so powerfully that I felt a tear of happiness for them. Now how good is a story that makes you do that??

Wow...

...so impressed with this story. It has such a perfect balance of, well, every element a good story should have! Great job, and thanks for the read.

From 10 minutes...

to eternity. Loved the competitive nature of the two women, as well as the aspect of doing something in a public place and trying to be discreet about it. Like a good run, your story left me breathless.

She pointed at my t-shirt. "Off."

Wonderful story. The teasing is utterly delicious. Very focused and deft. More teasing please...

Heck yes!

Got me off twice, thanks so much! Very enjoyable read as well as pleasurable. Well done!

wow

first time i ever read something like it. my underwear is really wet

i moaned and moaned

hot stuff

Dont Stop!!

Need More! NEED MORE!!!
Beautifull. I felt I was there with them.

Sexy and wonderful

Astonishing!

I adore your story and the way you tell it. This is orders of magnitude better than anything I've found on this website. As a male, I can't fully appreciate the experience of the two characters, but as a person who associates sexual pleasure with emotional connection I admire what you've written. Thank you.

In Plain English

Great story brilliantly told no trash just honest sincerity made you feel you were standing by wanting to be star character . in plain English love it

pleeeeease

write another one that continues this, i'm begging you lol, that was sheer genius i actually felt the story, the emotion, everything

Please

Please write another one continuing this story. It is so amamzing and i don't want it to end here!! Please keep going!!!

Fuck me! I think I just cummed...

awww. the end was so sweet. write more? it'd be great

Excellent!

Fantastic. The writing was brilliant and the story just as thrilling. Kudos! A 5 well deserved! Thank you for a great read.

First North Shore, and now this! You truly write beautiful work. Please keep going.

Wow

Your story was truly amazing, I only wish we had more of these to, maybe even a series before she left. All in all, amazing. Great job.

Beautiful

Wow, that was amazing, you write beautifully. A very gripping story I wish we could see more of it?

Great Work

You need to turn this into a series. This story has really inspired me to look into other works of yours. I really enjoyed this. Hot, sexy, and emotional without seeming too fast. Even though they had sex on the first meeting of each other, it really felt genuine and not some hook-up.

well done, beautiful writing

M-Y,
very inspiring to me as a guy who appreciates lesbian erotica and also tries to write it. This story needs to be expanded to a short series or write another with extended length.

Sappholust

Wow

This story is so hot. Please write more!

That's ...

... what I'd call a good short story. leaving much room for imagination and lots of questions but starting the right emotions.
Very good work.

Another great one!

I am not female, so I have never experienced the feelings you so well described in your story. Reading this makes me wish I could have watched these two with each other. Not as a guy watching two women get it on, but to somehow be able to experience some of what they were sharing with each other.

Thank you.

Buns Away

*grin* I swear, this was beautiful-- electric one-liner flirtings, a snap-quick connection between the two, and an amazing two characters who find each other oh-so-very attractive. This just bursts with romance and the warm hinting of the rest of their lives. So cute!! XD

Mmmmm.

You are quite a talented writer ...and lover, if this story is any indication. Thanks for sharing this witty, erotic and moving story.

I'm a lifeguard and first of all, If I walked in and saw that happening... Oh My God.. I would've instantly became wet and probably drop to my knees and just glared. Secondly, this story was quite a delight, just got out of school and was totally looking forward to my 4-day weekend, especially now that ive started it on a high note ;) My friends wanted to hangout like 30mins ago but I told them i'd "Text them when I'm ready". Postponing our plans so I could enjoy this story and myself for awhile. Ahhhh I feel pretty sneaky..

Amazingness

Oh my god! I masturbates to this, it was so good and such a sensation I squirted on my laptop! Thank you so much! Mwah!

Came so hard

I came so hard to this can't wait to read more. You got me so wet!! Thank you ;)

How sweet was that! As a male I can only imagine the excitement of feminine love, but this must surely have been it! Well done! Is there room for a sequel here?