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by Anonymous10/09/05

This Rocked!

Nice, very nice. I could have gone on for a few more pages

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by Anonymous05/30/06

Very Good

Perhaps you will add a few more chapters, good read and I'd like to see where it goes from here.

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by Anonymous03/01/07

Writing good, tense not so good

Very good reading material. I just got annoyed at how it was written in present tense. Maybe try past tense next time. Additionally, I suggest trying to cut-down on pronouns in your work, it can become a little repetitive or even ambiguous. Overall though, great work!

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