All Comments on 'The Humiliation of Big-Tit Darcy'

What might have been an amusing story was rendered unreadable by dreadful sentence structure and numerous punctuation errors. Spelling? You must have used the words "your" and "you're" dozens of times and practically EVERY time you used the wrong one.

I'm not one of the spelling police around here. I also write and despite my best efforts I make an error or three on every story. This goes well beyond anything approaching acceptable, and frankly I'm stunned they didn't reject it. Please do the people reading a favor and put some time into your work, and use an editor if needed. Thank you.

I enjoyed the story. It was a fun concept. Sections were hot and I rated it highly.

I only have two criticisms (Taken constructively - I hope).

First, it does look like you rushed it a bit. You should spend a little more time editing it. There were a couple of places where a reader stumbles while reading because of grammatical issues.

The second issue is a more of an opinion than a critique. Marcia is telling the story. She's an 18-year-old female cheerleader, yet she sounds like a man. The word selection and phrasing she uses in her thoughts and words are more masculine then I would expect from an 18 year old girl who happens to be a cheerleader.

In either case, I did enjoy the story. It’s made me interested enough to check out a couple of your other stories, and that’s all any author can hope for :).

It was not a bad idea the issue you had was editing. Sometimes you have to print things out and read over it first before putting it out there. Some of the errors you would have caught reading through it.

see what the others say about spelling. Proofread because it does make a difference on how the story is taken. Otherwise, not a bad deal at all.

I highly recommend editing this story, then resubmitting it. Excellent plot... horrific typos and errors...

Please Edit and proff read your next story if there is to be one.

Hot fucking story, but u did make some mistakes in language use.

Too bad I've got company, I could'ave m/b'ed to this one.

U gotta 5.

R

who cares about the spelling lol i knew what he meant~! This story was HOT!!!!!!

~*Delicatekitten~*

This story was very good. Please dont be discouraged by certain elements of literotica society. Keep writing and keep up the good work!

it was a good story, a bit predictable if you ask me, but not necessarily bad.

i agree with most of the others, the spelling & grammar were just bad...i love the comment that you should "proff read"...some people have no room to talk :)

there are volunteer editors on the site (myself included)...check them out.

that's what you get.. this sory has a lesson behind it..

An enjoyable read,the action was hot,i could imagine being in Darcys place,but what happened to Tony?

Or is a sequel about somewhere?

Look, the story and the action were fine, but having to read endless grammatical errors and, in particular, SPELLING errors in practically every sentence gets really OLD, really FAST: it trips the reader up and keeps killing whatever rhythm the reader's got going. Accurate basic grammar and proper sentence construction is something you should have already had down by the end of the sixth grade. Have someone competent EDIT (meaning: correcting all the mistakes in) the story, and have each of the corrected errors clearly marked in a hardcopy of the story, so that you can see how and why they are incorrect. Learning from such errors will help make your story-telling skills downright readable, which is the first step in making your story accessible to those with whom you want to share.

Love stories where the girl doesn't know how hot she is. Love stories about huge natural tits. What a coincidence!

Love the big titty sex and love the ending even more!