I enjoy this couple. I will be writing many more chapters
I sure hope you can feel their playfulness, love for one another.
I reveled in your tale A~ when this is a movie, I see steven like darin stevens on bewitched but she didn't seem like samantha...hehe more like a hot summer night
this story is erotic and humorus
Looking forward to the next episode. Will the rev. become more involved? Who was the eavesdropper outside the window? The thick plottens.
Take a little time to edit better. Sorry; I'm a stickler for punctuation and grammar. Also look at your use of cliche's. (That's supposed to be an accent mark, not an apostrophe, in case you can't read my mind. lol)
This story has amazing potential, but it could use some tidying up.
From one writer to another, I highly recommend Stephen King's "On Writing". It's entertaining as well as informative, and totally changed the way I write, and my view of what I have written.
By the way, I write fiction for children. lol I tried to write erotica, but I didn't get very far. It was tough!!! I admire you for your efforts; keep writing!
(Oh, damn it all! I can't remember my password. My username is granola girl. I hate anonymous comments; so cowardly, don't you think?)
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