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A really bad collection of cliches, cheap sentiment, or is that just sediment of nothing new to say, even dipping into forced rhyme "we both just want to scream". Your "friends" to do wish to tell you this, and you do wish to listen.
Yes I gave you a 50, it is as low as I mark, it doesn't even deserve that.
I am tired of YOUR critical attitude of anyone pointing out the faults of a "poem". Remember the email, you sent me slamming the one I got an "E" - that you didn't agree with. That is what is known as inconsistency, your best work shows evidence of it. This one doesn't - it is just bad.
Yes, I have the balls to leave my number - 1201
well.....
MET and I have had our differences (!), but this has a certain amount of naive charm. There is innocence suggested, almost like two gullible teens thinking no one else exists. While I don't think it is among Art's best work, the previous comment seems a bit overboard.
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From an older pen,
the sound and look of youth;
expressing complex thought
with innocence and at once
unadorned with aged "wisdom."
I'm the first to say it I don't understand poetry.
Art wrote for the soul to release it's fine beauty in a world of ugliness. The three of you prove the ugliness! Art has made people soar because of his kind words.
So you hate it, simply beautiful is sometimes to simple for some to realize it when it slaps them in their face. Come out with what you really are mad about or just shut your mouth.
Satin and Lace & Annora
take it a step further....
and work with the cliche`s to make them a part of something new. as we all know, cliche`s can be used so much that they lose their impact. we all don't always write that close to perfect piece each and every time out. this isn't your best, but i still like reading your stuff.........don
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