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I love romantic stories
For the most part you made it a nice read. The story was not dragged out nor was it cut short. Good going.
grammar nitpicks
The underlying story is good, but the overuse of pronouns and the homonym issues kept me from rating the story.
Please fix those issues and resubmit the story so that I can rate it.
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