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the mournful memories stanza...
throws off the rhythm a bit. Read this aloud and that is more evident. I also would seek to eliminate the two "its" if you can...otherwise quite vivid, I liked the imagery.
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At mournful memories
the old wolf howls,
while young join in
paying respectful homage.
Would have looked great illustrated with a wolf howling at the moon high overhead.
just reminded me
whatever happened to nwwolf I wonder...I think by leading him to this site...he found the pack of howlin females...nice pen...
this catches my eye....
Soft paws pounding
running over the soil
guided by the light
of moon rings coiled
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i'm thinking that *pounding* would be better to possibly say, "strike softly" and it will a more natural effect with nature. overall a nice piece art.......don
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