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WOW!
Great job.
Powerful
Great ending. The story was short but powerfull.
Excellent
Great short story. I felt for all those involved and wives who feel they can fuck others and get away with it should take heed! There will always be ramifications from your actions. Maybe not as brutal but your actions will affect someone! ALWAYS!!
Powerful!
Damn DG. You weren't kidding when you said surprises. I Don't think anyone thought that one up. Great writing but sad. Could easily reflect real life.
Fan in USA
ooohhhh ! ! !...this one is dark....
Thank god this does not happen very often in real life. However it does happen occasionally. (I refer to the murder, suicide part.) When emotions run deep and a person cannot get a handle on them, despair can lead to this kind of situation. I salute you for covering this topic. I think you will have alot of people disagree and not like such a disquieting tale. I hope not because it is a part of the reality of dishonesty of adultery. I really liked your point of Chuck asking for honesty on one question. It all boils down to that. The sex is not as terrible as the betrayal of trust and the lies.
Keep writing DG !
Gus
Wow
What a story. If more people thought about the consequences of their actions tales like the one you wrote wouldn't actually happen. Very powerful and gripping.
Good Finish
My Friend,
Not many real life cheating stories end up happy. In my story Cheaters Never Win I got blasted pretty badly because of the murder of the "Lover" and of course the suicide that followed too. Is it the norm? No of course it isn't, but it does happen and is a real possibility when the emotions elicited by cheating flare up.
Almost everyone cheated upon flares up and wants to kill someone for a time. Some just do it before they get the anger under control.
The fact that the crime of adultery doesn't warrant being shot is of no concern. This is not a rational event. Any irrational actions by your characters are perfectly acceptable to me and many others. Those who try to make it a rational event and apply pure logic are foolish. If people did that all the time there would be no crime at all because the rational side of humanity would talk ourselves out of it all.
Great Job
I look forward to your next submission.
Charleybear
Good
Very good story very sad
It really was rape
She was coerced into the sex with Mark after the first time. She said no... that make's it rape.
A black tale, well told. Maybe, intentional or not, a morality tale of what can happen when you open up your marriage/sex life to others. There are always consequences of some sort.
With some level of communication the final ending might have been avoided, but probably not saving the marriage.
Particularly sad about the grandchild.
Good story, the ending really filled in the blanks about who she was.
KUDO's Author
Powerful stuff in Realityville Author!! Really the marital suicide began much earlier and now just bubbled to the surface as it inevitively always does to infect all involved. A reality is that there are very few people without a conscience - a sense of right and fair.
jeffrey dommer comes to mind as an example of that rare extreme variety who apparently can't care and don't bother with others feelings as they only narrowly value their own.
Another aberation that is usually parasitic to most marital infidelity is the residual "honey it's just sex not love" viewpoint that is offered as a get out of jail card. Like it or not, acknowledge that non-forced sex is an emotional attachment of minds and body's that evidences deep trust and strong emotion for each party. Doesn't this help explain that most infidelities occur with people known to each other in some way. I believe it is a comforting factor to support the feelings needed to have sex with another in most cases.
Perhaps not lastly, but the cheaters conception of the safty of a one time away fuck not affecting their marital future is a sales job preformed selfishly upon one's self to justify personal want. They unreasonably apply the ostrich syndrome that it will go away if unacknowledged and not fester nor reoccur more easily once the trust and honor is fractured by one illicid act. OK - Enough.
Author - I love your imagination and style (don't change it please)- it's earthy and direct as well as believable. You are fast becoming one of the best in this theme of marital consequence as you are credible from front to back.
Again thanks Author - with High Regard
Wow!
Normally I'm "not" a fan of such dark stuff, but this was pretty good, only if for the comments about Do-Over's in life. And a few concequences thrown into the mix as well.
All I can say is Wow.
This kind of thing does happen
Nice story. People do kill their wives or their lovers and then themselves. It happens.
Very sad
I love the irony of your story. We don't need to worry about someone taking our happiness from us; we seem to do a good job of shooting ourselves in the foot or heart or head. I hope to read some more stories from you soon.
Boyd
Wow!
I'm sure it wasn't what the readers expected after reading all the comments from Ch. 1 Sad but a really good read. keep them coming. An Avid reader of your stories.
Two in one day?
Okay, most of us have trouble putting out any type of story once a month if we are lucky, but two winners in one day? I'm jealous!
Seriously, this was a dark finish to the tale, and reminded me of a few other dark tales, but you did a great job of portraying the anguish the wife feels as she realizes what she did. Consequences indeed!
SO MUCH POWER......
in this last chapter.....Superb effort DG!
Has it all...Crime and Consequences...Truth and Betrayal.
Art imitates Life (and death it seems).
How can you keep up this standard? Pleeeeeease DO!
Sad and Lifeless
Great forshadowing about husband's propensity for violence. Oh, yeah, this happens. About one per hundred million affairs. But this crowd loves consequences and the punished wife. It always amazes me that people with such unrealistic moral standards read Lit.
Hey MacDuke Huh?
One in a hundred million? Worse than picking the lottery? What are the odds of a woman who has a PI tracking her husband and photographing him. Then goes and runs him over 3 times with her car. With their kid in the car. In public and surveilence on her the whole time. Utterly impossible right! How many times did they play those clips on TV? thousands of times? Ask a cop about domestic violence. Check the crime statistics. Open your eyes. Most murders are getting so common place it only gets news coverage if the people are famous. Granted, there is more cheating than murder but I think your view and odds are a little out of wack. Good story DGHear
Violence does happen in many of these cases!!!
I have been the one to clean up after the fact too many times in cases like these. Ask any law officer what type of calls they hate the most and they will tell you it is domestic violence calls. As far as how common they are? I live in a small town, less than 500 pop.,and we have had two killings and several very bad assaults in just the last five years. All where the result of affairs. As far as consequences. All affairs have consequences. Just some are worst than others.
Excellent
I was looking and expecting a twist/suprise ending and this one was a suprise to me. Excellent story in keeping with your fine stories.
Bravo!
Excellent ending to a sad tale. Husband, wife and lover deserved each other with a good rationale for the affair.
Great job and I look forward to your next story!
SleeplessinMD
Excellent story
But certainly not a happy one.
Your actions can hurt far more people that you ever thought.
She never thought and he thought too much!
It is your style,
And not a bad one. I’ve said it before, and I’ll say it again. You present characters who appear average and normal, but behind the scenes, are out there. Realistic, absolutely, not all of us are 40 hour a week, church going, missionary position, meat and potato people. Some of us are P.I. hiring, Mercedes driving, running over cheating mate three times type of people. Keep up the good work. a fan always.
Good Story
DG,
You did a great job on this part of the story. The only thing I think you could have missed was Chuck leaving letters describing exactly what happened, and why he killed himself with a lawyer, to deliver to the kids when the youngest was 18. His final revenge on Linda could have been to get the kids to hate her. If that happened, she wouldn't have anything to live for, and either would kill herself or self-destruct in another way. How much guilt can you live with when you broke your marriage vows, betrayed the love of your life, caused him to kill your lover and then take his own life, and finally the kids hate you for causing all of the above which led to the destruction of the family?
Note from the author
Just a note from DG Hear. I want to thank the readers for the comments. All authors even though writing for ourselves are also writing for the readers. We understand everyone has different taste in stories. I try to first please myself and then hope I get an audience for that particular story. I try to be true with life, not every story has a happy ending. I try to write my share of both.
Without readers there is no reason to post stories.
The comment board is there so you can give your opinions on the story and the characters. I thank you for taking the time to leave comments. You could just as easily hit the back button and go to another story. Most readers help make my day, and I'm no Clint Eastwood.
So I just want to thank you for reading my stories and will keep trying to write them when an idea pops into my head.
Thank you
DG hear
Real life is much worse than Literotica
RE comments by MacDUKE and JDseller sandwiched around Anonymous: what goes on in the real world is orders of magnitude MUCH worse than anything presented on Literotica. Particularly reference MacDUKE's "One in a Million".
Quotes attached are from 5 minutes research on the WEB.
“From: The National Center for PTSD”
* 1.3 million women and 834,732 men are physically assaulted by an intimate partner annually
* 30-40% of women’s emergency room visits are for injuries due to domestic violence
* 30% of women killed in the U.S. are killed by their husbands or boyfriends
“From: Life Insurance News” Melanie McGuire shot her husband twice with a .38-caliber pistol, authorities allege. With the help of someone else, she cut through his body first with a scalpel, then with a reciprocating saw or an electric carving knife or both, an investigator said. She wrapped his severed head and other body parts in plastic, placed them in the luggage, then drove to Virginia and hurled the luggage in the water, again with the help of someone else, authorities said. As she was arrested Thursday and charged with her husband's murder, the story grew more complex. According to an affidavit in the case, Melanie McGuire was carrying on an affair at the time of the murder with a doctor she worked with at a Morristown fertility clinic, the investigator said.
Thanks.
To Dynamite Jack, many thanks. Every so often, it’s good to remember that the tragedies in our stories will never eclipse those from real life.
The Morality affair
There is no denying, the story is strong on the plot. It reads like a thriller. A second strength is the power of its moral conviction. I share the same convictions and enjoy reading a tale which promotes them. What came in the way to a real reading bliss was the same strong moral conviction going on overdose. As I was reading the story, I was thinking: “a morality play”, then I read another reader referring to the story in the same terms. Nothing wrong with this arcane form of church originated drama. It dates back to the middle ages, and the characters were actually named by their qualities such as grid or gluttony. They were all motivated by their main quality (see their name). At the end they all got what they deserved. In case you did not get it - there was an explicit lesson read to you at the end.
My intention is not to mock morality plays (they served a purpose), and certainly not to insult a writer which I enjoy reading. But some of the qualities of the morality play do seem to be present here. The characters seem a beat like type casting: ‘The wronged husband’ ‘The Dumb Easy to be tempted wife’. And like in a morality play, they seem to act and react mostly according to this one quality. Another reader preempted my thoughts by stating that this is how the author writes, discouraging anyone from even trying to ask the author to change it. I could not decide if that was a compliment to the author or not…
Nevertheless, I wish to express a challenge. Would not it promote the idea of marital consequences even more if the characters and the plot were more three dimensional? What if the wife had some grievances against the husband –still the RIGHT way is never to be dishonest. What if she is smarter and should have known better, or had a better impulse control. In such cases the husband should be even more upset at someone who has more tools to deal with life’s temptations. Making her so “soft” upstairs made me almost sympathetic to her…
The same applies to the husband. He could still be wronged even I he is not a pure victim. Even if he contributed to circumstances that made it harder for his wife to stay straight it’s still her responsibility.
If your writing talent should be my guide, I am convinced that you are capable of taking this challenge, that is if you are inclined to do so. Thank you for all you’re writing so far.
To our Good Author Dynamite Jack
you're a good writer; but your take on this story is so far out, I think you made your observations from the Twilight Zone!
this is a cheater; she's cheated on her husband before; she's doing it now (when caught) and she would likely have continued doing it (if not caught) in the future.
when someone grabs you in the genital areas and you say "no" but go on, later, to describe whta a sexual thrill it ultimately turned out and then you go on to have more such activities with others,,, "no" don't mean shit!
a truly upstanding person, be it man or woman, would not even need to get to the point (would not even put themselves in a situation) where the other person would grab or grope them, to be told "no",,, those who say "no" only after they have broadcasted their sexuality in more or less clear signals, it is merely a game with these words
per this story, the other woman whose philandering husband was killed by the slut "raped victim," yeah, right!), she got it right: "how could you live with yourself, when you fucked my husband, got him killed and then also caused your husband to kill himself? how could you look at the mirror and live wiht yourself?"
this charater is the truest of "rapists"!
her sexual activities caused two men to die within 24 hours of each other. men are violent anyway, but throw in this kind of deviant women and you have enough ammo to explode as it did here
Wow!
Tough story! Took guts to write this story. Its not the kind of thing most of us like to contemplate but it is something that happens sometimes. You didn't try to sugar-coat it, just "told it like it is" and I admire you for that. Hopefully more often than not, the stories will have a happier (and for me, more satisfying) ending but ... I think this one needed to be written.
The Best
This is most true to life story I've seen on here. Keep up the good work.
Pain
Most men could not accept deception from their lovely wife. The story here would be an accurate reaction form thise men.
Sad but true. So many lives destroyed for some flings.
that dead snuff is over kill
people have worst problems everyday.that killing one self is the extreme.
to whoever thinks people have worse problems...
I can think of very few problems that would be worse than the one person you know you can depend on in life lying to you repeatedly. Other than maybe a child dying, or a spouse... I cant think of anything more devistating. but I suppose thats how some people cheat so easily. Everyone has different priorities.
life is to valuable to kill one self and take it
there is nothing that should cause you to kill yourself.sometime weak moments in life can get you down.its' like the man woke up in the morning with sore elbow,walk down the street see a man with broke arm.walk a little bit more and a man with no arm.who can judge,but to me their always more fish in the sea.kill yourself and she still fucking somebody.
Ahhhh
A little sketchy on some of the details, but here is a story well worth reading and a story not afraid of showing that actions always have consequences.
Naturally it does take a bit of a fantasy flight for the sake of drama, but even than it was all within the possibilities of having happened.
It was well written (as all of your stories are) and easy to follow and read. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Reality...
I didn't LOVE this story, but I approve of it. This type of thing; homicide-suicide, happens way more frequently than anybody thinks. And YES, Ladies, think twice, before youtry the "No Harm-No Foul" scenario. If you're caught(and cheaters are NEVER that smart!), and you will be, then you will pay the price, big time.
And maybe more. And you will deserve it.
Be Careful
I enjoy all of your stories. All are well written, interesting, and grab my attention. In part one, though, you seem not to understand that the past tense of "to see" is "saw," not "seen." A small point, perhaps, but at least for this avid fan the error breaks up the flow of the narrative.
Great story telling
Thanks DG for a great story. I hated the whore wife and the cheating husband Mark. I felt sorry for the husband for taking what is commonly considered the easy way out. His actions were cowardly taking no thought for those he left behind to clean up his mess. Well to put it bluntly you definitely had me on this one from beginning to end. Thats what it all about.
P.S. Please give the husband another way out next time without losing his manhood or life. LOL
One question remains
I liked the story in many ways. It was as well written, as I have come to expect from this author. It had a believable plot and characters. Hence the high marks. What I would like to know is if she is so depressed, how does she avoid her own suicide attempt? She is personally responsible (indirectly) for the deaths of two people. It will get around that she is a cheating whore eventually. The truth could very easily get out. Thats a lot of strain for one person to be under. I think the ending is quite fitting - her life will be a living hell for her - after all I am a burn-the-cheating-bitch-at-stake kinda guy.
Fine but depressing story
Typical wonderful story by DG Hear, but much too depressing for my taste. One can't really say you enjoy a dark story like that, no matter how much you admire the writer.
60 yearold George
the slut wife could have given a better ending by
just sending herself straight to hell right away! The only two I feel sorry for in this story are the daughter and the wife of the adulterer.
On a second reading
Is there any way out of a miserable marriage in your stories other than death? I neeed to be reminded.
the cliche
it was going to be the last time, she loved him and other such trite; then why ? she killed him, and her price is not enough
Good
Good story DG. One small point though and I believe I am correct. When she returned she saw the torn underwear? That would have been collected as evidence. Right?
You are the master
of words and they just follow you and churn out the right emotions without fail. I know you are a published author, I just don't know who you are.
hubby at fault as well as wife and lover
story well written,but the plot sucked.what husband takes wife panties off in a public bar and show her pussy.asking for something bad to happen.why show off her pussy to others if he the hubby wanted something to happen.wimp for killing self.
Good Tale
I got the drift of the story I think. Consequences of cheating without permission can be deadly! After just completing 40 years of being a cop, I have to say that some commenters are lumping deadly domestic violence situations as being mostly sexual in nature. They are wrong! Most deadly domestic violence fights are about money or the lack of it. Better yet, most are about drinking and mind-altering drugs. Of course, extramarital sex is involved with people using drugs together, and/or paying for them.
( Drug whores) Then there is and over-consumption of alcohol which lowers inhibitions enough for people to do stupid things. (Alcohol is known the most dangerous drug of choice and always has been) Actually, very few murders are committed because of actual cheating. Now...drugged or drunk spouses have a lot of paranoia, especially when they think cheating is going on! Actual cheating generally results in divorce. Then there is the fighting over the kids...which can lead to violence and death in itself. All of these stories that I myself love to read are in the general category of semi-perfect white husbands with great incomes, lovely wives and great families. These almost-perfect husbands are faced with a loving but cheating spouse who is often described as an oversexed slut-wife! Some of the cheating wives are forgiven and they reconcile because the author gives him a little blame. Some cheating wives are kicked to the curb and divorced for daring to cuckold the gallant white father of her children. Some cheating wives are worthy of a terrible revenge for disrespecting the perfect white husband who deserved none of it...ever! These are just stories, and the last one though dire is possible. Let up commenters. It was harsh but made a point! A bit unrealistic maybe as I stated above...
Now I'm angry with these stories
Your stories can't have a straight time flow. Where did you learn that jumping back and forth made good writing? You set the male up as a marginally effective person and once again have no honesty or intellectual curiosity between the husband and wife. Since when is it still interesting to have two non communicators interacting for LW stories?
Originally enjoyed your story lines but now am disgusted with the characters and their neuroses.
choices
there are the basic editing things, but a poignant tale
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