All Comments on 'Rain in the Park'

The sexual activities did not progress enough to turn me on.

very well written, I loved it

Wasn't to bad. A few points, if you start writing in the first person continue with it don't swap to a third person perspective & secondly more deatil in the sex scenes would be could.

Man you gat to give me more !

That the "author" was satisfied enough so that HE submitted his text for others to read is disappointing. Very poorly done.

Unbelievable and so manly. Ugh!

Ending was too sudden and abrupt