All Comments on 'Genesis Project Ch. 01'

While I understand that much of this chapter was setting the scene for what comes later, it was extremely hard to get into the story. The run-on sentences coupled with the serious need for spell-checking and grammar-checking detracts far too much from this story for it to be an enjoyable read. Sentences such as "The reason why they hoped was for a very simple reason" should be mercilessly murdered in their infancy.

Other examples of this sort are littered throughout your writing. Please, please, PLEASE take advantage of the volunteer editors...

...to "Mutineer's Moon", D. Weber, Baen. Not that I mind, but it might be nice to give some credit to your inspirations.

good start but the 3rd person view is annoying :(

/sigh

Poor Pluto -.-

Come to my Lit page and you can continue reading this story

JC

Why the hell would they abandon their technology? They leave the ship and what, go totally primative, and start as cavemen. Yeah, that'd be how people would handle this situation. Hopeless.