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Great Story
Story had the feel of being there, over Panama. Been there and brought back a tee-shirt.
Non Sum Qualis Eram
Great Writing!
Excellent visualizations. Perhaps aimed a bit to low for the average action reader, ie, "tail rudder" is redundant, but I like how you made me feel what you were feeling.
I typically do not like first person writing, but you pull it off well. When you draw me into your feelings, you win the battle that the writer has entered. I would buy your stuff!
Write more. Complete your story!
Please carry on!
You should finish this job, it was well begun!
Thanks
John
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Thank you for the thank you luv, but this story is all yours. I'm proud of you.
Great story
You make it so descriptive that the reader feels like they are there, experiencing everything. I'm going to send you a few more comments privately.
Very well written!
No fair!!!
No fair to let this end with everything hanging out there!!!! Finish the damn story!!!!! Oh, and if you screw it up and kill everyone after getting me totally invested in the characters (And in such a short time as well!) then rest assured I will do my best to hunt you down and hurt you!!!!
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