Damn Paybacks are Hell. This one is a homerun. Loved it, your imagination had to be in overdrive. Thanks
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Anonymous10/19/05
I had to stop reading.
For a while when I hit your "It was just golf, nothing personal" line. I started laughing so hard my eyes teared up to much to read the screen for a while.
just one little trip to the woodshed, and to think, some people don’t believe in corporal punishment. Alright Blue88, your turn. A fantastic story and a fan always.
A great story. It could be called 'A Lesson Learned' I think.
There are lies and then, there are lies.
I was sure something was up when he quit paying attention to her orders. And he never even let the promotion dinner cross his mind!! Would have loved to have known HOW he knew, though.
Too bad. 24 years down the drain.
Great story HDK. Thing is she never had enough sense to ever pick up on exactly what he was saying to her or even seem concerned about.
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Anonymous10/19/05
Good Story
Nice lean story. Stan didn't come off too wellat the beginning but everything made sense at the end.
playingcardcompany
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Anonymous10/19/05
Great story
I know you were trying to tie the empty chair at the banquet and the empty recliner together, but I think you could have used a stronger metaphor there--it did not have the punch the TV did, or the fact of his using her actions against her. As in most cases, she did not realize what he was doing. Most liers believe others lie as well.
I loved the line of her suffering because of the names her father called her. As if that momentary embaresment would make up for all she had done. People like her expect a bandaid to fix a sucking-chest wound.
And it didn't spoil a thing. I was grinning by the time he got home from the golf game. I was laughing after the TV arguement. And when she came home spouting the same things he had already said to her I was in hysterics. A wonderful story my friend.
Patti
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Anonymous10/19/05
much better than the second part to Michelle
but I kind of guess she was cheating on him, after he bought the big screen TV.
Loved it! Loved it! Loved it! Thank You. Ronnie W.
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Anonymous10/19/05
Clever andfunny
Wrong category, obviously humor and satire. Also, no sex.
Aside from that it was very funny, if rather ham handed and obvious.
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Anonymous10/19/05
GREAT ! ! !
She said she was sorry for her affair, but in reality she was sorry that she got caught. Well, she screwed herself to the top at work and she screwed herself to the bottom with her parents and her husband.
Keep writing. I always look for your stuff. The folks that zeroed you out just don't get it, calling Stan a jerk.
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Anonymous10/20/05
On target!
I am amazed that you can write such a short but powerful story. You make the point so clear that it is not the number of years you are married it is how you treat each other. It is clear by the wife's behavior that the husband had loved and cherished her for years but she rewarded him with infidelity and disrespect.
I love forward to your next story.
SleeplessinMD
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Anonymous10/20/05
Thanks Author
I just read it again - you know how home made chilli and soup taste better the second day well some stories are that way.
You are enveloped in the flow and action trying to anticipate - you see it coming and it still feels good -perhaps even better the second time. That was some fine vittles my friend. Say couldja wouldja - another serving from your menu - soon please.
As is usual, this was a fantastic story. Like Patti, I laughed all the way through.
See, sometimes you do write some good ones.
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Anonymous10/20/05
Not very good
I'm a big fan of yours, but this was not one of your better ones. Condescending, arrogant husband and unfaithful, bitchy wife. Not much to choose between the two. the Ct Yankee
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Anonymous10/20/05
Great story...What more is there to say
To anonymous in the real world, are you really that stupid. The husband obviously knew that his wife was cheating, thats why he was acting that way. The wife was a damn whore and the husband is better off without her.
That was a wonderfully clever and well written story. I find myself constantly amazed by creative people. There is something awe inspiring about the product of a creative mind.
I have e-mailed you before with positive comments. What a relief it is to read about cheating wives instead of only about cheating husbands/men; after all there has to be a wife/woman for the husbands/men to cheat with. I enjoy reading your stories written from the other perspective and look forward to each new submission. After so much publicity making men look like scum it is refreshing to show women can be just as bad. Thanks so much for you submissins; please continue to share your writing skills with us.
Chuck
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Anonymous10/20/05
Turnabout
You have a gift with wirds. You madw the turn about very evident and justified. There is no doubt as to the logic used in this plot. Another "Well done!".
Thank you for sharing this with us
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Anonymous10/21/05
Good laugh for my last read in literotica
Kind of like "18 holes of golf" (another story in Loving Wives) but better, I really got a laugh out of it.
As a parody on the cheating wives genre it is hilarious. The contrasted positioning of the husband: calm (on the outside) and scheming vs. his mindless wife: loud dumb and of course sluttish to the core, makes for great comic effects. Then we see the husband carefully drawing a parable to her sinful acts, only it’s a practical parable, in which actions and props are better than words. It also has a bonus (for the husband)- he gets to give his wife a prolonged punishment: First, the embarrassment of the banquet, then the huge T.V set. All this time she recites, chapter and verse, the words that he would soon quote back to her. It could only work of course in a comical parody mode, with a cartoonishly dumb wife to play her part, but as such, it made me roar with laughter!
Sheer genius, applying all the tired clichés overused by cheating spouses, to another other form of transgression. It emphasizes out how ludicrous they really are. You'd think that authors would realize that they sound just as believable when used by the cheaters, but they still pop up in story after story.
And you have done your typically excellent job of weaving this flash of insight into a vastly entertaining story. Kudos.
English
Loved it!
You're back in business.
Thanks
Another good one.
GOOD
JUST SIMPLY SUPERB
Outstandingb
as usual - enough said.
perfect!
people, hdk is back!! short, sweet, direct to the point. reminds me of dortorwyldcard's "standoff". no chapter2's pls.
Beautiful job
She didn't know what hit her. Now if I could just do that to my husband...lol.
Once again the master
HDK, once again you showd us that you are the master of revenge. Very nicely written and loads of fun.
Good Read
Enjoyed this short romp. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to your next. Thanks.
Loved it too!!!
WOW!
That was REALLY well written
Well done
Very good, Now I know why your stories are one of my favorite. Very well written, need no second part, Brandy what a dumb women..... loved the story
When your're fucked, you're fucked!
And she was well and truly fucked!
Great job! Just one question - did you buy a new vacuum cleaner?
Your Very Best, Yet!
Damn Paybacks are Hell. This one is a homerun. Loved it, your imagination had to be in overdrive. Thanks
I had to stop reading.
For a while when I hit your "It was just golf, nothing personal" line. I started laughing so hard my eyes teared up to much to read the screen for a while.
My, my, my,
just one little trip to the woodshed, and to think, some people don’t believe in corporal punishment. Alright Blue88, your turn. A fantastic story and a fan always.
A good one
A great story. It could be called 'A Lesson Learned' I think.
There are lies and then, there are lies.
I was sure something was up when he quit paying attention to her orders. And he never even let the promotion dinner cross his mind!! Would have loved to have known HOW he knew, though.
Too bad. 24 years down the drain.
Where does the title come into play?
Yes
Another good 1. ****
Nice short story
Good conception, well executed. Reads like it was fun to write.
Right to the point
Great story HDK. Thing is she never had enough sense to ever pick up on exactly what he was saying to her or even seem concerned about.
Good Story
Nice lean story. Stan didn't come off too wellat the beginning but everything made sense at the end.
playingcardcompany
Great story
I know you were trying to tie the empty chair at the banquet and the empty recliner together, but I think you could have used a stronger metaphor there--it did not have the punch the TV did, or the fact of his using her actions against her. As in most cases, she did not realize what he was doing. Most liers believe others lie as well.
I loved the line of her suffering because of the names her father called her. As if that momentary embaresment would make up for all she had done. People like her expect a bandaid to fix a sucking-chest wound.
Good job--tight, clean, well plotted
JimDinMN
lol
another great story
I knew where you were going.
And it didn't spoil a thing. I was grinning by the time he got home from the golf game. I was laughing after the TV arguement. And when she came home spouting the same things he had already said to her I was in hysterics. A wonderful story my friend.
Patti
much better than the second part to Michelle
but I kind of guess she was cheating on him, after he bought the big screen TV.
And another hit from the master
Short, sweet and gets all the things done.
wow
I loved the reversal and 'parodies' of the normal 'oh I am so sorry' excuses...
There is a saying about gettting enough rope and soething about hanging isn;t there?
Thanks HDK!
Excellent
I love the humorous bent in your stories. This is a good example of that. Keep up the good writing.
Boyd
What can i say that others haven't
AWESOME!
I can see why she cheated on him
He's an asshole who didn't give a fuck about her feelings at all. She's better off without him.
Good On You
HDK:
Loved it! Loved it! Loved it! Thank You. Ronnie W.
Clever andfunny
Wrong category, obviously humor and satire. Also, no sex.
Aside from that it was very funny, if rather ham handed and obvious.
GREAT ! ! !
She said she was sorry for her affair, but in reality she was sorry that she got caught. Well, she screwed herself to the top at work and she screwed herself to the bottom with her parents and her husband.
You know for me you run either hot or cold.....
... on your stories, and this story was "VERY" good. I laughed so hard I couldn't stand it.
Of course I figured it out about 50% of the way through the story, but that didn't keep me from enjoying it any less though. My god it was good.
Nice story!!
Concise and Funny!
Excellent! I'm still smiling, even though there is a sad element to the finale.
Bravo
I love the symetry of your stories!
Short Story Excellence
I don't even claim to be on the same level as patricia51 but I had you figured out early on in this one to. Don't matter though. Still enjoyed it.
He's a total ASS
She should send this creepy child back to his mommy until he becomes an adult.
saw it coming but enjoyed it anyway
Keep writing. I always look for your stuff. The folks that zeroed you out just don't get it, calling Stan a jerk.
On target!
I am amazed that you can write such a short but powerful story. You make the point so clear that it is not the number of years you are married it is how you treat each other. It is clear by the wife's behavior that the husband had loved and cherished her for years but she rewarded him with infidelity and disrespect.
I love forward to your next story.
SleeplessinMD
Thanks Author
I just read it again - you know how home made chilli and soup taste better the second day well some stories are that way.
You are enveloped in the flow and action trying to anticipate - you see it coming and it still feels good -perhaps even better the second time. That was some fine vittles my friend. Say couldja wouldja - another serving from your menu - soon please.
With Appreciation and with High Regard
Very funny...
and very well written HDK! I guessed the end when he came back from golf, but like Patti said it didn't spoil a thing! Keep up the great work.
Hah!
I just passed coffee through my nose. Classically funny!
Another top tale from HDK
As is usual, this was a fantastic story. Like Patti, I laughed all the way through.
See, sometimes you do write some good ones.
Not very good
I'm a big fan of yours, but this was not one of your better ones. Condescending, arrogant husband and unfaithful, bitchy wife. Not much to choose between the two. the Ct Yankee
Great story...What more is there to say
To anonymous in the real world, are you really that stupid. The husband obviously knew that his wife was cheating, thats why he was acting that way. The wife was a damn whore and the husband is better off without her.
Very Clever
That was a wonderfully clever and well written story. I find myself constantly amazed by creative people. There is something awe inspiring about the product of a creative mind.
What a Relief
I have e-mailed you before with positive comments. What a relief it is to read about cheating wives instead of only about cheating husbands/men; after all there has to be a wife/woman for the husbands/men to cheat with. I enjoy reading your stories written from the other perspective and look forward to each new submission. After so much publicity making men look like scum it is refreshing to show women can be just as bad. Thanks so much for you submissins; please continue to share your writing skills with us.
Chuck
Turnabout
You have a gift with wirds. You madw the turn about very evident and justified. There is no doubt as to the logic used in this plot. Another "Well done!".
Thank you for sharing this with us
Good laugh for my last read in literotica
Kind of like "18 holes of golf" (another story in Loving Wives) but better, I really got a laugh out of it.
A TV. set as a parable!
As a parody on the cheating wives genre it is hilarious. The contrasted positioning of the husband: calm (on the outside) and scheming vs. his mindless wife: loud dumb and of course sluttish to the core, makes for great comic effects. Then we see the husband carefully drawing a parable to her sinful acts, only it’s a practical parable, in which actions and props are better than words. It also has a bonus (for the husband)- he gets to give his wife a prolonged punishment: First, the embarrassment of the banquet, then the huge T.V set. All this time she recites, chapter and verse, the words that he would soon quote back to her. It could only work of course in a comical parody mode, with a cartoonishly dumb wife to play her part, but as such, it made me roar with laughter!
KOLKORE you said it!
There's nothing more to be said
HDK please keep them cuming.
Sorry my spelling again, I mean Coming.
DC
A gem
Sheer genius, applying all the tired clichés overused by cheating spouses, to another other form of transgression. It emphasizes out how ludicrous they really are. You'd think that authors would realize that they sound just as believable when used by the cheaters, but they still pop up in story after story.
And you have done your typically excellent job of weaving this flash of insight into a vastly entertaining story. Kudos.
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