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fucking awesome!
yeah.. sadistic and completely hot. yum...
Not the usual fare
The previous "reviewer" should have taken the time to actually read the story. Too bad. They missed a very well done tale that was original in many ways. I liked this one a lot.
Good hunting
OK so I've seen similar themes but how many really totally different stories exist anyways?. I liked this story it had more than enough depth to be interesting and action enough to keep it moving. Please Don't be put off by anonymous as*holes. Well done and thanks for the story.
Perfect
No, seriously, this one is fantastic. Definetely one of the best stories I've read here. Thank you for such an interesting story, can't wait to read more from you!
Filthy, Barbaric and...
burning with desire: everything that turns me on. I love the depth you gave the characters and their emotional turmoil for one another. I look forward to your future works of art.
YES!!!
Got my vote...10plus for sure. i was a little skimish over some parts even the painslut in me got a little again...skimish over some parts although the lil painslut in me loved it too. Being female this is not my normal type of story but, i did love this one. It had great depth and emotion as well as some great hot sex...and yes, even love, although some of the "norms" wouldn't see it that way. please continue on. You are very talented. respectfully fan in Texas
I had to read it twice immediately!
WOW! what a fabulous and well written story! I really loved this, had to read it ticw--darn!! I was nearly ashamed how hot it made me because it appealsed to me on so many levels--well done! I passed it on immediately!
unbelievably good writing....
I started to read this expecting some typical, over in a few paragraphs story, and was totally immersed in the read by the end of the first 4 paragraphs! I was actually excited at the end of page one to see how many pages there were!
1)the writing is dead on excellent. you have talent for both characters and dialogue hard to find in this genre.
2)original....I hated some of the painful moments, I mean the brutality definitely had me queasy as a female reader, but geez, you knew how to keep the reader on edge. I felt that they both had 'jobs' to do, so this was anticipated pain, and not just pain because of some hatred of women. I liked how you made both Sasha and her so strong, so deep, so emotionally conflicted even with their 'jobs'.
3)I have to go back to dialogue...so few writers get how dialogue, when well-written, can make you hotter than any of the rest of the story. when there is good dialogue, how he calls her baby, and you can almost hear that masculine, eroticism, her fear mixed with desire, geez, that's so hot.
I would punctuate it with continued descriptions of what they are doing...ie, one thrust, two thrusts, she writhed, and pulled her legs up higher on his back...that can only make it better.
4)this is what I mean by how GREAT you wrote: "You're mine," he growled. "Say it." She did as he asked. "I'm going to fuck you so hard you scream for me like this every night. Do you understand?" She did. "And nobody else is ever going to touch you, do you understand that?"
OMG! You GET the idea of true nonconsent/reluctance...wanting something you shouldn't...wanting to be completely someone else's obsession to the point of exstacy. wow.
5)one other slight critique...just describe your leads a little more. I would have loved to read more about thier appearance...her hair color, her eyes, her physicality, his attributes, what did he feel like to her when he enters her, big? wide? how turned on were they to one another's bodies/minds? The only thing that would have made their first scene even hotter was if she had been a virgin!
I PRAY you continue their story!!! I want more of them. He has other ways to make her his yet....he wanted her anally, I can definitely 'see' him dominating her thru doggie style. I imagine him as a jealous man. Would love to see him work for her same agency, or somehow see her in danger and him have to save her. These characters you created are simply the best that the reader just NEEDS MORE!!! Please continue!! what will she be like for him when they are in civilaztion...when they have the trappings of sensuality, hot clothes, nice car, better location....seeing her in a dress, eating out...what will these two be like?
I also loved that you got that the 'smut' moved the story along....it wasn't just for smut's sake, it seemed to contribute to the growth of these characters raw need for one another. Perfect really.
will be waiting anxiously to read more of your work...soon!
hot and wonderfully
barbaric, you got my vote.
Totally REfreshing
Origanlly intoxicating
wow wow wow
that was like so good, i dont normally read long stories, but wow
Best yet
Longer than normal, but the talent shone!! great story.
The story was recommended by another reader.
Delightful
Rather refreshing to have a real story unfold after the main event... And everyone loves a classic good guys vs. bad guys episode! Well written - thanks for not killing me with bad grammar!
You know...
...I personally don't ever want to be used quite like this. Just a little pain, please. But this twisted love story kind of just took me over. I found it hot and exciting even when I was squeamish over the violence. Very, very well done. Write something longer and have it published. I'll buy.
Hot!!
Loved this! Am still hot from reading it, though personally would rather not be hit hard.
Awesome!
I loved this story! Very hot, and there's just something so appealing to me about such a brutish man having actual fondness for his victim...Keep up the good work!
Superb!
Great stuff... desperately hot, immensely readable. Well done, very well done!
sooooooo hot
best story i've read on here... soooooo hot!
fuckin amazing!!
that story was fuckin amazing i mean its like im going from being on the edge of my seat from the intensity of the story to sopping ass wet from the hot sex in it..your amazing..please keep them coming!!
utterly the most awsome thing i have ever read
That was awsome. I have never read anything like that. One mintue im wanting her to kick his ass the next i want them to be togehter forever. and the lust between the too of them was so intense, that at the end i even freaking cried when he told her to stay with him and that he loved her. well done keep the stories rolling.
GREAT
I loved your story !
kick ass.
I loved that she wasen't just some weak little tramp being used. She actually kicked his ass right back. Huzzah for the alpha subs!
Wow!
I simply couldnt make myself stop reading!
This far surpasses, not most, but all, of the stories Ive read, and even alot of the published stuff too. I usually dont leave comments, and I dont really do compliments, but your writing is disturbingly addictive.
Im speachless, breathless, thrilled and horny as hell!
Thank you for writing. :)
Best Ever!
Please keep writing!
oh my god
wow. youre story made me so hot. ive a serbian boyfriend sxevo and his twins names sasha :) hehe wish they were more like your guy. loved it x
I've lost all feeling in my fingers...
Make love to me.
More Please!
It's too good to stop, please continue with this great story! Sex is crazy hot!
Wow! Eagerly awaiting sequel!!!
I never knew I could be such a sucker for violence - if applied correctly. What a hot, hot read! You really managed superbly to blend elements that conventionally would not go together.
Please, please, pretty please, write a sequel to this story! I simply must know how these two continue with each other.
Certainly I will not be able to sleep tonight. I will crave a man like Sasha, but at the same time think about how a man like him could ever possibly redeem himself. For it is surly sinful to crave someone like him.....
Just loved it and hope for more. Thanks!
wonderful
this was simply wonderful, please keep up the great work!
Thank You
Incredible and unexpected blend of passion and violence. I had no idea the two could be melded together so deliciously. I am hooked. Please write more... but NOT about these two characters. I enjoy their story just as it is.
Many thanks.
amazing
I absolutely loved this story, it was really hot and really cute at the same time. Awesome work!
amazing
that was absolutely AMAZING!! i loved it!! i cant wait to read a sequel about the two of them!! please write more!!
omigod
amazin!! such an amazin story i was so hot 4.. luved everythin an want there tu b anotha! keep ritin!!! love it love u xxxxxx
I never knew....
No complaints at all. I had no idea something that harsh would have got my pulse raising and blood flowing. This story is one of a few i have read. It is BY FAR better then any story i've ever read.
Bravo!!!!
More more more more!!
- Cj
going to get my toy now
LOL ok, well this is the first comment i have ever written, and if you dont believe my title.. just listen to the sound of my toy now ; )
Dripping wet
It's so hard to find a story that can keep my interest. It was actually hard for me to decide if I wanted to masturbate to it or keep reading, so I had to do both!
PLEASE keep up the good work!!!
WOW!
This is a hot read! I found it in the top lists and began reading the 1st page, by the time I got to the bottom I couldn't stop reading!
I agree with one poster here, please describe your characters more, I helps in our part. But, other than that, the story was fast paced and VERY complete.
One Of The Best, If Not THE Best
I truly enjoyed your use of narative, the fast pace, and the eroticisom your tale invoked. This coming from a womans perspective...I doubt many of us would enjoy being punched in the face once, let alone repeatedly, but somehow you made this story work. I only have 3 negs to share. One, for me the use of the word "arse" instead of behind, ass, cheek, etc...was a real turn off; it didn't blend with the nature of the story, and sounded too cute in a down home country sorta way. LOL Two, you left Sue entirly to the imagination as to her looks. And 3, you honestly did leave the anal assult till later...it never came! Aside from my personal little gripes, you really hit the mark, and I don't think it would be a stretch to say that you could do this professionally.
Happy Writing,
Badhabit530
fantastic story
not many get the mix between violence and passion right, but this was spot on! a really amazingly hot read and one of the best stories i have read so far. please write more stories like it!
Please keep writing!
This is the best story I have read so far on this site! In a way it reminded me of an historical romance, but with raw passion and violence. As another reader (a woman like me) mentioned the beating and specifically the punches to the face, I am not too sure about, but overall kept me wet and unable to stop reading. Please keep writing, your very talented.
Stunning
Wonderful characters, great story, and a perfect ending!
Wow!
That was amazing! It wasn't corny like most of these stories are and I really fell in love with the characters. The ending really made me feel satisfied! I am going to look for more things by this author. Oh and did I mention that it was SO SEXY?!?!
Intense
This is my perfect fantasy, in 5 pages.
I could not stop reading.
Write again, please, for the good of the world.
very well written!
I was very impressed with your writing. The story is extremely erotic, and this might be an odd comment, but thank you for taking the time to use language well. Bad writing really distracts from the story. I also don't think that you should describe the characters physically anymore than you did. This way we can all imagine what we find most attractive. It was nice not to have a typical blond, D cup female character for once. I think such blunt descriptions would have taken away from the eroticism of the story. Both characters were extremely sexy.
Thank you!!
You managed to capture one of my deepest fantasies so perfectly! And so well written. Bravo!! Must go beat off now!
Unbelievable!
Everyone else has already echoed my sentiments, but I have to say that this is the best damned story on this site! Just incredibly well written--bravo!
WOW
I loved this story. It is the best I have read to date. Please, please continued submitting.
Thank you,
*Applause*
really great literature. think about trying to publish some of your work. great job!
Wow...
Hot, hot, hot. I don't usually read stories in this genre, but I needed something new... and what a perfect way to start.
Favorite
This is the only story on the site that I've read multiple times, and I'll most likely end up reading it again. Looking forward to more from you! Don't keep us waiting too long.
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