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Under a Bruised Sky

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/18/05

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I love the scene you painted here. You might consider rewording the first line. Maybe it is just me, but it comes across as being a stair of the sun-- I think you mean the top stair that is in the sunshine? Just a suggestion. I first kissed my husband on beach steps, not as photoworthy of Lauren's but I woke with bruises and sandy knees so this poem hit me right....there... :)

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by My Erotic Tale10/18/05

nice poem

a jig saw of words that dance thoughts and images in my mind while reading nice poem

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by sack10/19/05

lovable little poem....

refreshing in its innocuous quality!

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by jthserra10/19/05

Non-Erotic...?

No... those were very erotic images that spoke of a wild abandoment and intensity only mimicked by the bruised sky. Powerful poem.

jim : )

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