the better of the two, this one has arresting images
makes a big impact within its small compass
"they ignored her
dune climb as the black
beach bogged her footprints."
I could totally see this, and it reads wonderfully
The imagry was wonderful in this. It's short but says a lot. There is easily enough here to write a story from.
You have a nice easy style!
Love those last two strophes in particular!
Good poetry is great exercise for the mind, and my mind just had a great work out.
POW ~ this has got really powerful impact with imagery that keeps your eye on her final walk.
The imagery in this rendering was just outstanding. Very enjoyable.
she trod into the future. TK U MLJ LV NV
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