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I like the ending!
I know that I am many times too critical of the stories where the couples that get back together. This one just makes sence. They both where at fault and had both cheated. They do have children together and have to react with each other then anyway. They are not just continuing their marriage. They did divorce and live apart for some time. They are now starting a "new" relationship that maybe different but seems to work for them. Good story JDseller
Excellent Conclusion
Thanks for concluding the story. I found it to be touching and realistic. They didn't just jump into each other's arms and pledge their undying love for each other and quickly remarry. They both realized their own faults and took advantage of a second chance. Kudos DG.
Idiot
If you bother to learn how to read, you would have read about his affairs on the FIRST CHAPTER of this series.
You better lay off jerking off for a while, because your brain needs adequate blood supply to function properly.
Nice wrap-up to an interesting story.
I agree with your intro that this would wrap it up. I like the part where the characters actually don't know what the hell it is that they want. Just like real life. Keep going as you are doing a great job. Thanks.
Tail End Pete
True to life
To DG, This to me is as true to life as it gets. No one really wins in most divorces. We all have to start over. When your in your fifties that can be pretty scary. The old addage is correct. 'You never knew what you really have until you lose it.' Absolutely a great read.
Thanks
An avid reader
Sweet
I liked it, a nice, sweet ending to a tumultuous breakup. Why are we such suckers for happy endings (lol) Good work, hope more tales will be coming.
A good final
As I said in my last comment on the "Revisit" I usually don't comment until a story is complete. So far you have gotten three from me but all were worth it. You showed that whether they loved each other or not their long relationship gave them at least "togetherness." Without them together they had the pain of the loss of being together for everything from just talking, to support, and to sex. Part of each of them was gone and I think the pain you show is realistic. I see reconciliation as both feel they need and want each other.
Although there were some grammatical errors I rated this five, as a grammatical error doesn't stop a good story. I do like your writing but this definitely should be the end for this story otherwise I would have to write a fourth comment. I still want more stories from you and thank you for your words.
Like Blue88, I'm a sucker for a believeable happy
Like Blue88, I'm a sucker for a believeable happy ending. As always I look forward to your stories and you do not disappoint.
Happily ever after
The events and emotions were depicted well. The ending was a little hard to believe though based on how disloyal and dishonest the two characters had been for 20+ years. I do not personally care how any of these stories turn out. I try never to pass judgment on any of them. Reconcile or split up, I don’t really care. In this case the happy ending was not consistent with the just how horrible these two characters have treated each other over the course of their marriage. It is too great a stretch to think that all the years of betrayal by both parties could be forgiven so easily. You have the characters apologizing a few times and passing messages back and forth through the kids and then the accident. The wife gets to play the loving nurse and all is well. It is just too hard to believe that in a family that has gone through what this one is portrayed to have gone through, that no one is mad at anyone.
I will admit that I could be wrong. Perhaps because they were both such miserable people they would be more likely to forgive and forget. Or perhaps good cooking conquers all. I grew up on fish sticks and pot pies and still suffer a steady diet of frozen food. Maybe I am just jealous.
well
AS always well written and presented with characters who are just people. You don't get into the trap some writers do where everyone is a billionaire that owns their own multi-national corporation and has a 900 inch dick or 66GG breasts.
Tell us more of em!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"b"
this story has a life of it's own
I thought the last chapter was "the end". This one is the final one, but as you said life must go on.
My only complaint is the placing of the quotation marks, when you had someone speaking, was confusing to me, the reader,if they were still talking to someone or to themselves. Kind of like a person on a cell phone with a headset.
Please resist!
In future, please strongly resist any urges you may have to respond to your readers wishes concerning sequels. This chapter was certainly not needed and dramatically revised the characters to force them into actions and attitudes they did not display in earlier episodes.
It all
fit together, liar and liar, cheater and cheater, idiot and idiot, lost and lost, lonely and lonely, heartbroken and heartbroken, man and woman, husband and wife, parents and kids, grandparents and grandkids, and last but not least, a good cook and a very appreciative diner. Actually there were no others in the story that could have fit together to make a happy ending, considering their age plus their life together, even with all the bad, there was some good. Great job, great delivery, I’ll be reading this one again. A fan always.
I see nothing wrong with
people controlling their own lives!. Yeah, there were problems, but being lonely is hell! I liked the way you pulled it together, showing that in spite of their problems they still had a strong family. The quotes were a litle confusing, but the story was well told!
Er... I liked it
Tanks fo the last chaper. We are ll human beans. We make mistakes and live with the consequences. Forgiveness IS a part of our make-up, whether others believe it or not. I think this story would have worked without the 'dozens' of affairs on the part of the narator.
Thanks for your good work. Please keep it up.
you write so well and real down to earth
another home run in my book.i'm baise i'm one of your fans.keep writing you're one of the reason i read stories on this site.
Good wrap up, DG
Believable characters and actions. Logical conclusion. Good work.
well done
A very nice ending to the story. thanks for writting it
Loved it...but
I enjoyed your ‘conclusion’ immensely, probably because of the feelings it invoked more than the technical construction. You had a theme and you developed it very well. However, I do have a few concerns about your writing since I know you are focused on improving it.
First, fire your editor and learn when and how, to properly use quotation marks. I stopped counting the quotation problems after five. They diverted my attention from the story. Characters are speaking then narrative appears but the speakers still are speaking. That should not happen.
Second, you probably needed a lead in narrative to provide an overview of the story to date. The one you wrote was much too long and somewhat distracting. I think readers of multiple part stories have some obligation to read the preceding chapters if they want a full understanding of the story. Therefore, a lead in summary, if used, should be very short.
Third, I really applaud the way you expressed the environment and mindset of a long-term married couple. I think the dynamic of a couple who have been married thirty years is very different then those of newlyweds or couples with less than a decade of togetherness. You expressed that interchange well in this chapter. I wish you had given greater detail to that aspect in the previous ones.
I was skeptical when I started reading this chapter because I thought that the last one really concluded the story. Nevertheless, you surprised me with a conclusion that even with its problems, was very well done. I am looking forward to your next work.
several problems
This used the concept that, even if it wasn't enduring love, there was no one else for him. He might have had interest in someone else even if it didn't work out. The concept that she's all there is between him and eternal loneliness just isn't realistic.
If I recall, and I'm not going back, his affairs came after she pretty much shut off to him. He had given up on having much of a marriage with her so it was an outlet. I'm not saying that's laudable, but it was a coping mechanism, not simpmly a selfish decision to betray her. So I don't see his affairs as in the same light of seriousness as her basically staying with him because she couldn't have the guy she wanted.
That he was deciding there could not be anyone else for him, and that she was very important to him as a result, really detracted from the story, in my opinion. It would have been much stronger for him to have seen how she reacted to the accident, staying round the clock, willing to take care of him, and had second thoughts about the way he viewed her. By the time of the accident, he was already interested in pursuing some kind of relationship with her even without any knowledge of whether she gave a damn. To try to build that relationship with somebody who doesn't care for you, as those years of marriage showed, is a self-defeating project. Maybe she has had a change on her own as a result of all of this, but he doesn't know that when he decides he wants her. It would be a much stronger story line if he wanted her because of something he saw in her rather than because he has no other options.
DG Hear
I had a number of readers who wanted to know what a family goes through and how they go on with there lives. I tried my best to show that life isn't always a bed of roses. That real people have to live with their decisions. Lonelyness is a big part of life after divorce. I'm sorry about the Quotations marks, my fault.
I understand not every story is for everyone. That's why I try to make it interesting for the readers who like mine. Thanks again for reading my story. By the way, this story is concluded.
DG Hear
ok,but
i tend to agree with 'Anonymous in Boston Bean'. how did this wife all of a sudden become a sort of martyr type? this is the woman who cheated for 28yrs and happily had another mans children, or at least thought she had. was not even kind enough to tell her husband to his face that she was leaving him. the fact that things didn't work out the way she thought they would doesn't change what kind of dispicable charactor she is.
the husband is hardly a likeable charactor himself. he admits to cheating,and seems very self centered.not very warm.he too you try to recast,from cold and vengeful,to lonely and cuddly.
you did a masterful job of pulling them back together. i'm all for happy ending and new beginnings,etc. but i think this story went too far. i thought your story was a better story without this last chapter.
thanks for your effort and will be looking forward to more stories from you!
don
I thought it was good
Im not a big fan of lovey-dovey reconciliations when the cheater is an unlikable person. I liked this one though since it seemed sort of realistic. The couple didnt have deep feelings for each other so that makes it easier to forgive and forget than if one was truely in love and deeply hurt by the other.
Not every marriage is like a story book so writing a story about two people who decide to get together for comfort and companionship, rather than out of deep true-love type feelings, is a nice change. Of course the wife is only with the guy because her plans fell through but I think they both realize that. He is with her because he wants something from her as well so it works out ok for both. Maybe not romantic but about as happy an ending as could be expected given the characters the author created.
Good Ending
Companionship, compatability and communucation are very important to a good relationship. Certainly, as much as sex. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Boyd
good ending
dg, this is a very good ending. since you indulged others, psl give me a gazillion dollars.. my account number is 123458-57392-1633. it would be most unfair not to humor my request
Divorce Should Be Outlawed ...
if spouses can reconciliate after this.
Although I only skimmed through it, I was not the first to know that the characters have nothing to do with the original characters.
The readers should not get what they want if it does not make sense.
Thanks.
The warmth, want, and need of the familiar
That is what George and Dorothy are both experiencing. They each recognise that they both have screwed up royally and hurt not only their mate but themselves. They are like a team of plow horses who've pulled at the traces in tandum for many, many years. When they were put out to pasture (read divorce), just like that team of horses, they will walk across the pasture side by side in tandum because it is familiar and they need to. It may not be love but the need and want for the familiar are there for the both of them.
Sincerely...........Thank you
Thanks for this empathetic and sensitively treated conclusion. Just a nice epiplogue of an all too common everyday circumstance of divorce in a poorly maintained marriage. A good portrayal of a couple with strong family connections reconnecting after both of their actions had caused a marriage to fail. Well done in that you managed to bring it together with both characters retaining their dignity and recognising their part in the failure.
My score only reflects a lack of pussy pounding!
Looking forward to more fine work from you, All the very best!!
After the divorce
I wrote this story for the people who read my stories. They know that life goes on, but I gave them a glimpse what what happens in some families. Not everyone reacts the same. But George and Dorothy had faults. They were also two lonely people who loved their family. They were doing their best to go on with their lives. I applaud them for that.
DG Hear
True To Life
Good job DG! Your conclusion was true to life. Both screwed up but in the end it's really family that counts. Neither apparently undersood that until to last reunion.
I liked
the ending. It's nice to see a couple try.
Happy endings
God!!!! I love happy endings.....
For the Fairy tale ending - how low can we go?
The blindfold - backward- triple- flip- flop - really final – ending of the story maneuver did not work. No real surprises here. You gave me (and other “realists”) what we like in the “Concluded” follow up, and you gave the “fairy - tailers” what they like here. What I call the Flip flop maneuver – symbolizes the ever increasing difficult corner that talented writers corner their poor ex-couples, and from which they order them to make the “death maneuver” to their reunification. We close our eyes, breath in deeply and hope against hope, like in the circus, that they will defy the law of gravity and will not crash. Ok, if they did not, it was due to invisible cables that kept them in the air - and to the safety, and every one is happy for the ticket that was paid. I am most intrigued by some of the readers who actually call this last ending realistic. Go figure, people’s sensibilities.
Another ‘downer’ in this “finale”: The reasoning for re uniting goes so low and or so cliché (the ‘good home cooking’ or ‘the nurse and the patient’ – please…).
In actuality, reality is more bizarre than our imagination. Beyond the horizons of most peoples’ common experiences and sensibilities, one could always dig and find the bizarre, the rare and the unbelievable – only it did happen some where (go to the middle pages of your local paper). So who am I to claim incredibility, if ending emotional cruelty, plus alienation of love, and life long of lying and eventual public humiliation is traded for chicken and potatoes and future life with a constant reminder of terrible memories.
movie stuff
Hollywood should buy this story from you and make it into a movie. Of course the sex staff would have to be dampen a little bit (not too much). The end scene would be the come back again couple making love in the sunset.
Wonderful love(sex) story.
Intriguing--And Only Natural
This story does not belong on Literotica. Instead some Producer needs to take it and make it into a movie.
What now? How about another story great job
You had me involved in every chapter. I really enjoyed it. Thank you.
thanks
Great story,Thank you.
excellant
Great story, I used a box of kleenex.
Great story
This was a really good story. The sequel and the conclusion really were the icing on the cake. It's good to be able to readjust our thinking when we are sober (had some time for reflection) and live our lives as we were meant to. Our egos are our biggest obtacle.
A Tale Well Woven
Finally a happy ending that makes sense! It was a joy to read.
On the negative side, I really don’t have any comments. Your writing style is enjoyable and easy to read. Your characters are real people, acting and reacting, as real people should. The emotions of anger, loss and melancholy AND the reasoning that evoked these emotions were spot on.
This is not only one of your better stories; it is one of the best stories on the site. Thank you very much for sharing.
Just Some Thoughts
After reading some of the other comments, I don’t think Kilgore is absolutely wrong in his expressed emotions, but I do feel that he needs to realize that his comments only fit into a situation where there had been a strong emotional love between the two main figures, or at least felt so by one of the two… to begin with.
This was not the case in this story. There had never been a deep emotional tie between the two. He had admitted to having had one-night-stands all through the marriage. Theirs was a marriage of convenience and comfort.
The respect for him (the most important element in love and marriage) had been destroyed within her in her emotional love affair, the act of cheating and her feelings that the children were not his.
His respect for her had been destroyed by his affairs, and the fact of his knowledge of her affair and the doubts of his children actually being his or not.
YET
They returned to each other because of the very fact that the emotional damage (because of the limited depth to their love to begin with) had not been that great.
The new found respect for each other, in hers & his ways of managing family affairs, her cooking, and him being a solid stable worker and businessman, was what brought them back together. It was a value greater to them, than any other higher and deeper emotional love.
They reunited as an older couple would for security and convenience. Their level of love (as an older couple) cannot be placed and judged with that of a younger couple. That would be like comparing apples to oranges.
The melancholy of the story is not to be found in the fact of the 28 year long affair and the damages it did, but rather in the fact that neither of the two was ever able to reach an emotional love, to another person, to any greater extent or depth.
Inconsistent...
In the earlier parts the wife questions that she doubted she ever loved him. What changed? Sorry this was an unnecessary and frankly poorly plotted epilogue.
Quite Romantic
Thank you for the conclusion, it brought a smile to my face. Like a pair of old slippers they complimented each other, and what is funny is that neither never knew how intimately their lives functioned together like a well oiled machine until it was over. I really loved this story. Yes, I can see them ending up together, especially at their age. Both loved their children, both had raised them well and both supported each other now - before they had been "cheap" with their feelings for each other, but now...oh yeah, this story is VERY romantic.
good story
I usually want to see the bitch burn in hell. This time, I'm not so sure. I know that I would not marry The silly bitch again.
I know for a long time ...
... why I love your stories. Thank you very much for always good writing and entertainment.
Sincere regards
Nucleus
True LifeYour
Your story the frist three chapters sounds just like
my life.I was Married for 33 years.How ever there will
be no starting over again.She killed our Marrage with
her there can be no going back.
thank for your great story.
Dan
silverfoxrch@yahoo.com
Usual fine writing
I always enjoy your writing and this story follows your usual pattern of excellance. I did get a little tired of his total preoccupation with her cooking skills. After 33 years of marriage, a bitter divorce and the discovery that wife had cheated on him for most of their marriage, you would think he could think of something else beside her culinary skills to attract him back to her.
60 year old George
Stupid WIMP!
I hate sad endings. This pathetic wimp ending is as sad as you can get.
Deus ex machina
I am a big fan of reconciliation but this was not plausible. I just can't buy it.
Poor Plotting???
I dont think so. When you are feeling rejected and lonily the rest can indeed get clouded. This couple discovered that they made a life together over 30 years. Then found out what they had after they missed it. Growing up a little late! I don't really like the mushy endings, but in this setting I thought it was fitting.
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