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a few more
keep it up it has the start of a good series here
usa
Okay . . .
Sorry, as much as I like these types of stories, this one needs a lot of work. There is no flow to the storyline, it is more like a series of short glimpses, like snapshots from a camera. There were a lot of little typos and misspellings that did not help either. The concept was good, but you should have developed the interplay between the sisters more, as that was the main thrust of the story. Rather than introducing a fourth character.
JimDinMN
Interesting Plot but..............
as another responder said not very well done.
Would have liked the spankings more symbolic and less violent also.
not bad
could have described the panties and made it sound a little more real but over all good story
Timeline
Your math is a little off. If he married in 1985 and the first daughter was born in 1990( five years later) and the second in 1992. They would be 15 and 13 now, not college age.
A word from the author
Thanks or pointing out the error in the birthdays which I hope doesn't detract from the story. It should be evident from the context however that the girls' ages are 20 & 18 respectively.
Mark
another good one
enjoyed the story please keep them coming. love too read a sequel.
Good Story
Now a Follow-Up with Daddy and Both Daughters would be Most Excellent.
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