Family Battle

SO HOT!!!

THIS RULES
I READ IT LIKE 10 TIMES!

A fine start

I think it will be a pleasure to see where you go with this story because you've made a good start. Thank You. Ronnie W.

You have dropped off teh ratings and public

comments on later chapters. This tells me someone does not like your style or the subject. I am leaving the score at 50 where it is automatically set on starting a comment.

hmmm...

initially i was wondering where you were going with this, but in the end it was GREAT!

I was like....

Hey,what's all that "and I was like..." for ?
That's real shitty next time try not to repeat "and I was like..." more than twice or any other phrase, okay?

a normal day

I found the story to be poorly written. I understand it's fiction, but the stuff that's happening seems too forced like you're just fishing for an idea of how his cock could possibly end up in her pussy.

Interested in a variation on this theme?

Good story but are you interested in posting a similar story with a Father/Son fight? I'd love to see a all-male version of Family Battle...

not good. they r too old. nothing erotic.

Wow just reading this for the first time and I love the way you set this up. I can't wait to read more

I'd love to read that second day!

I would pay big money to witness this. So fucking hot!!!

good story...

But desperately needs dialogue.