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My opinion, in this case, punctuation would help.
just enoug
periods are stops signs for speed readers
I read this slow and allowed it to soak in and felt your poem was touching, rasing a few questions that are probably best left un answered a very nice write (~_~)
I think this was intended to be...
one long sentence, in which case any punctuation would just clog the thoughts. I think your format works, and especially like the first line!
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Made me work here ~
breathless ~
good write.
I tend to write this way ...also
and it had enough pull to hold the thoughts..most enjoyable..ty/blue
cathartic release....
and you've captured it that leaves me feeling it in just the right place - the eyes blur. nicely done.....don
Just enough...
to pull the reader in and hold them there long after the words are gone. The words flow faultlessly from top to bottom for the most part, though I would agree to a certain extent that it needs punctuation. Just here...
"...to bring me back to the bed.
Closing my eyes through the pain."
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