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Nicely done!
Nice pacing and very erotic. I also went back and read your two previous stories. You are a talented writer (absolutely LOVED "Fireplace"!) You should write and post more often!
very well written
You set the scene well...good luck in the contest!
Very Nicely Done
That was a great story. Thanks for writing something that pushed boundaries and borders.
Welcome back
Your writing skills are quite good and your story lines are excellent. I hope you continue to write, and also hope it is not as long until we see your next submission as it was between the last two!
An erotic
story and a pleasure to read.
Good luck.
Black Tulip
Strong story!
The main improvement I see is more development between the two women. The sex was hot, but I didn't buy Rae's sudden willingness to submit, especially if she had a husband back home. Some more detailed flirting between them ahead of time could have set the mood better.
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