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leaving what may be considered shallow critique, I enjoyed this very much. It has a timelessness and longing to it that seems to transcend the now.
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Good descriptions throughout. Thanks for the read!
Curiouswife
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Your poem was mentioned in the new poems review thread.
Tess
dcpoet44 take note
Now here is a "journal entry" type submission that can stand on its own as good poetry!
Thanks for the read, Darkmaas.
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I read your poem this morning and wondered why it's here. I hope it ends up in other places.
gorgeous
thank you for sharing this with us, we are fortunate--
the ending was so personal, I felt like the whole poem was getting a feel for the characters, so that the last lines could hurt like only people you care for can hurt.
annaswirls
A Thoroughly Enjoyable Poem
An excellent poem with some raw emotion in the words. Heartfelt...
strong images
throughout and i take note. darkmaas, you have a very nice style. as eve says, it does belong elsewhere and you should definitely search the journals for placement. i for one don't always write with a ton of images as i work from a bukowski angle. nevertheless a good job......don
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,500 poems.
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