Use a grammar checker, because every time you meant barely, you said barley. Other than that, it's a good story so far, but a bit short on the details for my tastes.
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Anonymous10/30/05
Details make the difference
Without the details to build the story you lose the real effect. Great story plot - with more erotic description for the build up you would have a great story. Hope to see more from you.
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Anonymous10/31/05
love it....
i wanna find out more about the cousin, the mom said some things about her that would give her character i think, also why is she so hung up on him and will he tell he her that he didn't relize who she was right away?
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Good but
Use a grammar checker, because every time you meant barely, you said barley. Other than that, it's a good story so far, but a bit short on the details for my tastes.
Details make the difference
Without the details to build the story you lose the real effect. Great story plot - with more erotic description for the build up you would have a great story. Hope to see more from you.
love it....
i wanna find out more about the cousin, the mom said some things about her that would give her character i think, also why is she so hung up on him and will he tell he her that he didn't relize who she was right away?
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Please another chapter great story line
fantastic
I had a lovely time reading it. YOu brought back the memories of my little fling with my cousin.
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