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Very nice...
we look forward to the continuation of this story, and others. This is the kind of story that both the wife and I love to read. RandM
Ever hear of a proof reader?
What could have been a decent story turned out to be a chore to read because you can't spell and have even worse grammar.
LOVED IT...even if grammer police dont!
Really liked the tale guy, so please follow it up. As for the grammer...hell this site has languages posted a english reader...duh...cant read. It about the STORY not the I after E, as long as its readable. Its like people that watch a movie just too pick it apart...let it go. Anyway follow it up and soon.
Worst
The spelling and grammar were so bad I refused to read it!
BS
How stupid can a writter be? Guys are not interested is watching 35 year old strippers.
Good but check your work plz
I liked the story but I really wish the author had proof read it for some very distracting spelling mistakes throughout.
Agree with Kokomo. Potentially great story let down by spelling & grammar mistakes. Proof reading is so critical. Ken
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