Great story. Myself, think more detail during the sex act. What he was feeling? What was the girls feeling? Just a little detail could go a long way. Still a great story. Maybe add more chapters to it.
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Anonymous11/02/05
More please
Quite a hot topic - would like to read more of their escapades!
I really liked your story as it was well-written and quite enjoyable. It seemed to flow really nicely and reminded me of a literary version of a couple of my favorite short video features when one of the more creative producers or directors in Show Biz is in charge. I'll bet that there is a place for you in the Southern California film industry. Maybe not in Hollywood, CA exactly, but not too far away from there in Chatsworth, CA. I would love to see what a brilliant guy like Patrick Collins of Elegant Angel Studios could do with one of your stories. While it's true that this story may have been a little bit predictable, I really did not find that to be a problem. The bottom line for me was that, just exactly like all of my favorite films, your story was reasonably short and had a very happy ending.
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Anonymous11/29/09
So the poor bugger gets fired
then his ex boss' wife and daughter fuck his brains out only for him to find out that his wife is a fuck slut whore - big deal - had he not lost his job he would never have had the mom and daughter fuck him or found out his wife is a total slut - needs to get rid of the bitch as she has obviously been playing away games before she gives him a dose of the pox, STD or AID's - you just cannot trust the bitch women as you never know what they get up to while you work your butt off.
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10/02/11
Very Nice
I appreciate hot stories that include an 'aha' moment or two, and this story delivered.
I'm only sorry that there aren't anymore - I could see him starting his own company with his ex-partners wife working for him, maybe even the daughter. Maybe even getting the daughter pregnant?
Definately wasn't the type of incest I was visualizing when I started reading this one. Question is will Gerry get a Job and will there be a scene between Misty Gerry and Terri and Terri? I sure hope so.
English
great
Great story. Myself, think more detail during the sex act. What he was feeling? What was the girls feeling? Just a little detail could go a long way. Still a great story. Maybe add more chapters to it.
More please
Quite a hot topic - would like to read more of their escapades!
Hooray for Hollywood, or maybe Yay for Chatsworth
I really liked your story as it was well-written and quite enjoyable. It seemed to flow really nicely and reminded me of a literary version of a couple of my favorite short video features when one of the more creative producers or directors in Show Biz is in charge. I'll bet that there is a place for you in the Southern California film industry. Maybe not in Hollywood, CA exactly, but not too far away from there in Chatsworth, CA. I would love to see what a brilliant guy like Patrick Collins of Elegant Angel Studios could do with one of your stories. While it's true that this story may have been a little bit predictable, I really did not find that to be a problem. The bottom line for me was that, just exactly like all of my favorite films, your story was reasonably short and had a very happy ending.
So the poor bugger gets fired
then his ex boss' wife and daughter fuck his brains out only for him to find out that his wife is a fuck slut whore - big deal - had he not lost his job he would never have had the mom and daughter fuck him or found out his wife is a total slut - needs to get rid of the bitch as she has obviously been playing away games before she gives him a dose of the pox, STD or AID's - you just cannot trust the bitch women as you never know what they get up to while you work your butt off.
Very Nice
I appreciate hot stories that include an 'aha' moment or two, and this story delivered.
I'm only sorry that there aren't anymore - I could see him starting his own company with his ex-partners wife working for him, maybe even the daughter. Maybe even getting the daughter pregnant?
good, very good, very very good ...
Loved the 'punch line' !!
Nice
That was perhaps the most fun I've seen packed into a one-page story.
Definately wasn't the type of incest I was visualizing when I started reading this one. Question is will Gerry get a Job and will there be a scene between Misty Gerry and Terri and Terri? I sure hope so.
Very Good
Short and sweet. Loved it.
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