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Good
Love your humorous stories very much. Too many readers take all this too seriously anyway.
Boyd
Bad Writing
Hey, I think you're trying to be humourous, but U failed miserably. Your converstation sequences are stillted, and almost unreadable.
This makes a good story bad, and it needs editing.
Oh Dear
Re'Bad Writing" 11/01/05 by rudystahrman in USA SE ALASKA: Don't become a salaried critic, Rudy; you wouldn't make a dime. Your understanding of humor appears nilch, your understanding of author's intent and style likewise and I'm sorry I've given you reading difficulty. Hopefully in your State there are reading and comprehension assistance programs. To rate that article 00 rates your mentality, I would think.
Humourous
Humourous and sexy, an excellent piece of writing. Keep writing, please.
rudy
mission accomplished
Reads like a bad SNL skit with genitals. :D
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